||FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:
==Cats and dogs==
==Cats and Dogs==
-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:01, 1 November 2015 (UTC)
Chapter review and feedback
- Overall, this is an unsufficient chapter mainly because it fails to address the topic, does not include citations, and contained plagiarised material.
- For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.
- Some theory about emotion and some theory about human interactions is discussed. However, the chapter fails to consider theory related to the connection between emotions and human interaction.
- There are no citations.
- Addition of case studies or additional examples could be helpful.
- There is no review of research.
- The Overview is very vague. What factors? For example?
- Many statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the
- The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page).
- Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our", "your" etc.).
- Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
- Some of the material appears to have been plagiarised from http://www.huffingtonpost.com/dr-carmen-harra/controlling-your-emotions_b_3654326.html?ir=Australia and was removed.
- The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
- See earlier comments about heading casing
- No images or tables were used.
- Learning features
- Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive.
- Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement.
- Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour).
- Grammar and proofreading
- The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the
- Check and correct the use of abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,").
- APA style
- Direct quotes need page numbers.
- The reference list is not in full APA style.
-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:52, 15 December 2015 (UTC)
- Overall, this is a basic narrated text presentation.
- The presentation is not able to played online (it needs to be downloaded).
- Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter).
- Theory and research weren't covered.
- Include citations about evidence for claims.
- Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples.
- A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful.
- Audio is too fast - consider slowing down. See this article for more information about speaking rates.
- Varied intonation can add interest and engagement.
- Consider included images.
- A link to the presentation was not provided at the top of the book chapter (a link has now been added).
- Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
- Description is minimal but sufficient.
- No link is provided back to the book chapter.
-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:05, 15 December 2015 (UTC)