Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Hot memory and emotion

Comments

Hey! I really liked your topic! In particular, the real life implications section is a great way to apply the knowledge. I also really loved the moving picture of the skull, very cool. I made a few suggestions in bold for you to look at and made a few grammatical changes , I hope you see them before the due time. I would also suggest breaking up the writing a little more if you could with a few more pictures, text boxes, borders or colours :) All in all, well done :) U3083545 (discuss • contribs) 07:39, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

= Comments

Hey! Your chapter looks great. Only thing I could see was with your images I think the APA format is underneath them you need to have 'Figure 1. ..." 'Figure 2. ...". Otherwise good job! U3097090 (discuss • contribs) 03:55, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Hey interesting topic,

Just a suggestion you might want to look at hot memory and post traumatic stress disorder. I came across this a little bit when researching my topic.

Cheers Njzarb (discuss • contribs) 03:04, 14 October 2014 (UTC)

Hi! Cool chapter. Has a nice layout to it and I love the animated image of the amygdala that you added. I like how you have real-life implications that can actually occur. Don't forget to add figure numbers under all your images too! Other than that, I think you've explained the key brain areas and summed it up well. Good use of external links as well. Just a suggestion, but maybe you could add the 'remember the last time..' section at the top of your page just above your overview or highlight it in a coloured box to draw some more attention to it. I think it looks a bit out of place being just below the title which is in a large font size and then having the multimedia link under it. Keep up the good work :) --Bt1718 (discuss • contribs) 12:27, 24 October 2014 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:02, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Heading formatting

Remove bold from headings; just use default heading styles. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:02, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter which is undermined by overly long sentences and a lack of referencing. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory is reasonably well covered in terms of breadth and depth, but it is not clear what evidence/sources many of the claims are based on. Research Although use of research is implied, many statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Textbooks are over-used as citations; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources. Written expression Written expression is somewhat problematic. Many sentences are overly long. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned) Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout The chapter makes basic use of several images. Image captions could be more detailed. The chapter is well-structured. Learning features The chapter makes some use of interwiki links, but more could be added to make the text more interactive. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. No tables were used. Add See also and External links. Grammar and proofreading Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals') The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) APA style Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations (e.g., (McDonald, 1998, Phelps, 2005) should be (McDonald, 1998; Phelps, 2005). Put in-text citations in alphabetical order. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)). The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:11, 20 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, marginal presentation. Structure and content Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Textbooks are over used as the sources. What are the practical, take-home messages. Some basic theory is covered; there is little in the way of a review of research. Include citations. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples. Communication The audio narration seems hesitant - ehearse a few more times. Audio is well-paced. Check and correct audio/slide syncing. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement. Production quality Overall, production is very basic. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter). Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or audio transcript). The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:46, 3 December 2015 (UTC)