Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Hanger

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Hey! I had a look through your chapter and it looks great. I like that you have little boxes that have fun facts and links so people can read more about it. The snickers ad is a great addition! Good luck! U3096927 (discusscontribs) 11:08, 24 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Additions[edit source]

I added a few paragraphs under the heading 'The brain and energy' and included references. The changes I made can be found here. I found a few articles that may also be of use to you: one on Carbohydrate ingestion, blood glucose and mood and another on Carbohydrate memory and mood.

The first one has a good case study you might like to use on Quolla Indians (I just copied and pasted this from the article: "The Quolla Indians live at a high altitude in Peru and are known for their high murder rate and family feuds. Among anthropologists their claim to fame is that “these Andean highlanders are portrayed as perhaps the meanest and most unlikeable people on earth”. Bolton (1973) noted that many acts of violence appeared to be irrational, even to the Quolla, as they were stimulated by the most minor of events. As a violent response was not culturally approved Bolton wondered if the aggression of the Quolla was a reaction to food. He noticed a strong craving for sugar and considered the possibility that their aggression reflected a tendency to develop low levels of blood glucose. Bolton found that in those ranked as most aggressive there was a tendency for their blood glucose to fall to low values in a GTT (glucose tolerance test)."

  • Bolton, R. (1973). Aggression and hypoglycemia among the quolla: a study in psycho-biological anthropology. Ethology,12, 227–257

The second one also has an interesting section on the short and long-term effects of carbohydrate on mood.
Hope this helps! U3083676 (discusscontribs) 23:36, 23 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Oh wow, thank you, u3083676! You are a superstar! I was about to fill that section in, but you've done an excellent job :) Case study is a great idea too, I hadn't heard of that before U3036889 (discusscontribs) 03:08, 24 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a fabulous chapter which conveys a very sound understanding of theory and research about hanger in a readable, interesting way, and makes excellent use of the interactive wiki environment.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is very explained, with a balanced and integrated consideration of physiological and psychological theories.
  2. The scenarios/examples were helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is particularly well described and integrated with theory.
  2. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression was excellent.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing
    2. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. The chapter makes excellent use of interwiki links to other book chapters and to relevant Wikipedia articles.
    2. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent.
  5. APA style
    1. Check and correct APA style captions for tables and figures.
    2. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order.
    3. The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for seriated journals.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a well prepared and executed presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Theory was well covered.
  2. Perhaps consider describing the single most important study in more detail.
  3. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples.
  4. Practical suggestion helpful: practice self-control.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is clear and well-paced.
  2. Increase font size (or zoom in) on some slides to make text easier to read.
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  4. The combination of images and text is effective.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall, well produced.
  2. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
  3. Clear, accurate title.
  4. Description is minimal but sufficient (e.g., also include brief description of presentation).
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