Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Extrinsic motivation and antisocial behaviour in children

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Pictures that may be relevant[edit source]

Anti social behaviour among youths
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Suggestions and Feedback[edit source]

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:51, 29 October 2015 (UTC)[]

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter. which could be improved by .
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is well covered, explained and applied.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is well covered.
  2. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context.
  3. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. The Reeve (2015) textbook is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  5. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned).
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing
    3. Add bullet-points for See also and External links.
    4. Table and Figure captions should be more explanatory.
  3. Learning features
    1. Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive.
    2. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and correct the use of abbreviations (such as "e.g.," and "i.e.,").
    3. Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals').
  5. APA style
    1. Add APA style captions to tables and figures.
    2. Check and correct APA style for direct quotes page numbers.
    3. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 15:00, 27 November 2015 (UTC)[]

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Use the Overview to set up the problem - this could be made more salient - e.g., what is an example of anti-social behaviour that might be of concern to understand and change?
  2. Some relevant theory is explained in a basic manner.
  3. Consider using more illustrative examples.
  4. Emphasise practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is well-paced, but somewhat monotone; varied intonation adds interest and engagement.
  2. Minimal use of images.
  3. Basic, largely text-based slides.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The presentation should provide an overview of the topic (and psychological theory/research and practical implications) and not the chapter per se (a subtle but important distinction).
  1. Overall, well produced.
  2. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
  3. No description - fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions).
  4. The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).
  6. No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:23, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[]