Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Endorphins and emotion

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:54, 22 November 2015 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter which could be improved by tidying up the structure (e.g., expanding on one sentence paragraphs and sections with a single sub-section). For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. The chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides an interesting, integrated synthesis of psychological theory and research on the topic. Theory Dictionaries are weak sources; try to use primary, peer reviewed sources. Perhaps there is more room to consider the cognitive affects/contributions of endorphins to emotion. Perhaps more detailed or a longer list recommendations for how to boost endorphins could be added. Research Research is well covered, particularly with regard to positive and negative emotional impacts. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is generally very good. Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., "we") Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well-structured, but is chopped up into (overly) small pieces. Learning features Interwiki links were used effectively. Could link to more related book chapters. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise) APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Check and fix APA style for intext citations in brackets at the end of sentences - the full stop before the brackets needs to be removed. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:54, 22 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid presentation. Structure and content A good balance of theory and research. Slide 3 - these theories aren't used/related to endorphins? Slide 5 - too much text - consider abbreviating and converting to bullet-points. Perhaps include some practical, take-home messages. Communication Audio is clear and well-paced. Slides are and easy to read. Consider including images. Production quality Overall, well produced. Description is minimal but sufficient. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (e.g., in the description or in the presentation slides). No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:32, 26 November 2015 (UTC)