Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Emotion-focused therapy

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Hi Stefanie,

I really like the layout and structure of your book chapter. I understand that you are still currently working on it.. however, i think you might benefit from including some applied examples, potentially consider adding some hyperlinks and maybe breaking down some of the content into smaller sentences to make it a little easier to read? I think you're definitely on the right track. I have "starred" your chapter and will provide more feedback as you continue along. Good luck! --U3096823 (discusscontribs) 09:27, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

I really like the structure of your chapter so far. I think the key concept boxes are a great idea as they help to clarify the theoretical components of your chapter. I've added an overview and see also section to your page. The checklist on the assessment criteria page - https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Assessment/Chapter - mentions needing these and they seem to be a standard part of most Wiki entries. Obviously, feel free to delete if you'd prefer not to have them. Good luck! U3036568 (discusscontribs) 20:55, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi Stephanie, Great looking chapter thus far. I noticed that you don't have a sub-heading to your chapter title which gives the reader an indication of what important question you are hoping to answer if someone picked your chapter off a book shelf to read. I think this would be helpful. Also due to the nature of your topic, it would be helpful to perhaps include a case study of someone to whom you could apply the theories of emotion-focused therapy t them. I see you have headings focussed on couples, depression etc at the bottom, so that may be a good place to insert a case study. Although please feel free to ignore my suggestions also!! Well done and all the best. Candice--CJBush03 (discusscontribs) 00:38, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi Stephanie, your book chapter is looking great so far. I really like that you have put colorful boxes highlighting the key points. They are really helpful for a reader who just wants to skim read. One suggestion, which you don't have to use, is that the colour of the box you have used for your title doesn't do anything for your page. A brighter colour that matches the rest of your chapter would probably suit better and be more aesthetically pleasing :) :) (3083783ro (discusscontribs) 07:09, 20 October 2015 (UTC)=u3083783)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:00, 22 October 2015 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter which seems to peter out; add a Conclusion.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. EFT is very explained, with examples.
  2. The case study was very helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is well explained.
  2. Avoid using textbooks as citations; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  3. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context.
  4. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression is generally very good.
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    2. Add a Conclusion
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well-structured.
    2. Add See also and External links.
    3. Excellent use of Boxes and Tables; consider adding some Figures.
  3. Learning features
    1. Add more interwiki links.
    2. Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent.
  5. APA style
    1. Check and correct the use of "&" vs. "and" (Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets).
    2. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)).
    3. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:49, 1 December 2015 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Exactly what happens in EFT could be made more clear.
  2. Good focus on research.
  3. What are the take-home messages? (Conclusion?)

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is clear and well-paced.
  2. Varied intonation adds interest and engagement.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter).
  2. Bullet-point text is easier to read if its left-aligned.
  3. Audio could be better synced to slides.
  4. Some slides are shown for little time to digest them.
  5. References?
  6. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions).
  7. The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images.
  8. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).
  9. No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:54, 2 December 2015 (UTC)