Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Elective plastic surgery motivation

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Just testing. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:19, 20 August 2015 (UTC)

Hi Iga :) Interesting book chapter! Will you be going into more focus areas in addition to birth deficiencies and burn victims? For eg. I personally would be interested in seeing something about body image :) --U3046579 (discusscontribs) 05:50, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

Hi! Great book chapter topic! I remember hearing somewhere that for some people who have elective plastic surgery (particularly breast augmentation) it isn't their first procedure. Perhaps you could cover something on why people choose to have additional elective plastic surgery procedures - is it because they weren't happy the first time around, are getting something new done or are doing it for social/self-esteem reasons? You could also look into the percentage of elective surgery patients who have had similiar procedures done before. :)--U3081677 (discusscontribs) 05:10, 20 September 2015 (UTC)

Hi, I would also be interested in motivations for plastic surgery in circumstances where there is no physiological 'need'. Burns victims and birth defects are both areas where plastic surgery allows people to live 'normal' lives, what about things like breast augmentation and 'nose jobs'. These types of surgeries are growing in popularity and more people are choosing these options. If you wanted to keep the focus on helping people maintain a normal lifestyle rather than enhancement surgery you could also include breast cancer victims who have had a mastectomy. Just a few thoughts :)U3064759 (discusscontribs) 12:54, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi! This looks like it will be an extremely interesting chapter. I wonder if you’ve thought about looking at the differences in motivation for different ethnic groups in undergoing cosmetic surgery? I read a really interesting article that suggested that racial minorities are not motivated to have cosmetic surgery because it means sacrificing important aspects of their ethnicity but Caucasian populations don’t have this concern - http://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC2884924/. You could even discuss the cultural differences in the types of surgeries performed. For example many Asian women will undergo eyelid surgery to achieve a more Western style look. South Korea reportedly has the largest number of cosmetic surgeries performed per capita in the world - http://psycnet.apa.org/psycinfo/2003-03727-005. I’m sure you’ve got a lot of ideas for your chapter and we only have a small amount of words but I thought this might be a good addition to demonstrate that motivations can be varied! U3036568 (discusscontribs) 05:12, 18 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello. This chapter looks interesting and I have just seen a class action lawsuit recently in the media due to botched cosmetic surgery. I am sure you will but do not forget to reference a lot of the statements that are being made as it is still in APA 6. All the best polishing up the chapter looks great so far. David James Stevenson (discusscontribs) 05:27, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi there. A really interesting chapter well done! I love the examples of what constitutes plastic surgery, and the layout is really easy to read. Just for consistency, maybe move the definition of motivation box to just under the heading like you have for the others, just so you define it before you start talking about it. Also maybe consider providing a link for the '30 countries ranked' list instead of listing them on the page? It just takes up a bit of space for not much information. Well done though its looking great!--Sgerstenberg (discusscontribs) 20:50, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey! Great book chapter and lots of good suggestions from everyone. The only other thing I would suggest is making use of hyperlinks to improve the quality of the chapter! I have gone ahead and added one in for 'motivation' - I hope this is alright! Let me know if you'd like me to add some more! Good job! U3048330 (discusscontribs)


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a promising chapter which is could be improved by focusing less on describing elective plastic surgery and focusing more on the motivations involved and improving the quality of written expression. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. The case study examples were very helpful.
  2. Coverage and application of relevant motivation theory was weak.
  3. Add a conclusion, with take-home messages.

Research[edit source]

  1. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  2. The Reeve textbook is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  3. The chapter could be significantly improved by providing a more indepth review of research about the motivations for elective plastic surgery.
  4. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression was not of an acceptable standard mainly due to missing words and grammar problems.
    1. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
    2. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page).
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well-structured.
  3. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links could be added (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive.
    2. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar of some sentences needs to be improved for the written expression to be of professional standard (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
    2. Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals')
  5. APA style
    1. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)).
    2. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations (including use of & and et al.).
    3. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:54, 22 November 2015 (UTC)


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well structured, although there could be greater emphasis on reviewing psychological theory and research about elective plastic surgery.
  2. Excellent use of examples.
  3. A conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages could be helpful.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is clear and well-paced.
  2. Visuals are clear and easy to read.
  3. The combination of images and text is effective.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall, well produced.
  2. Rename the title so that it is more descriptive and meaningful (doesn't include motivation - no need to include chapter overview).
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:44, 26 November 2015 (UTC)