Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Domestic violence and emotion regulation in children

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Hi ! This is a very interesting topic, I'm looking forward to reading it when it is completed. I thought perhaps to further understand the effects of domestic violence on a child's emotion regulation, it might be worth considering the effects it has on an adult's emotion regulation. Just to either further emphasis the different impact it has on children or to show that there isn't a great difference, depending on what the research says. U3100230 (discusscontribs) 00:39, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey! Really interesting and topical issue, I can't wait to see your finished chapter. Love the layout of your page, its engaging for the reader. I only have one small suggestion and its totally optional - maybe consider putting in a link for the 'bobo doll' experiment when you discuss the topic of modelling. I know we've seen this video 100 times during our psych degrees, but I've always found it to be a really interesting way to convey the theory. Good luck with the rest of your chapter! --u3105740 (discusscontribs) 23:39, 22 October 2015 (UTC)


Hey love! This chapter is coming along so well, you articulate everything you say so precisely! And I like how you are using one colour scheme the green and purple it is really appealing and invites you to read it. I noticed two places where the closing bracket was missing so I just put those in I hope that’s okay! I also think relating the contingency reactions to emotions with domestic violence to bring relevance should be added although I see you have written a sentence to change that at the bottom so you are all over it :) Also, this could just be my interpretation, but when you talk about child maltreatment, maybe say something like "the maltreatment can be the result of exposure to domestic violence"? Because maltreatment could be a range of things not just domestic violence. But that could be just me! I think it looks great and its so interesting i cant wait to read the rest --U3065920 (discusscontribs) 06:03, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

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Hey girl, Great chapter! Really informative and interesting. Looking forward to reading it again later today :-) One question, (you can take on board or disregard, totally up to you!) I was wondering if there are any specific gender differences in emotion regulation of children? I ask this as, from a social psych perspective, females are usually brought up in a more emotionally expressive way (gender roles) and males in a less emotionally expressive way. I wonder if gender roles and how children are brought up specifically impact their emotion regulation, for example, are females more quipped to recognise and regulate their emotions due to their emotionally expressive gender role? Further, gender stereotypes highlight that females are highly emotional, does this mean anything for our capacity to regulate our emotions? Does it differ for males? Or is it more of a biological process, do hormone changes influence our emotion regulation? Just some thoughts! Feel free to disregard if you feel they are not relevant :-) Awesome work! keep it up! :-) Em.jacobs (discusscontribs) 02:40, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey! Great chapter and great topic! My only suggestion is to add the external link, http://dvcs.org.au, as it is a useful resource for women and children who are victims of domestic violence (it even has a "Quick Escape" option that exits the browser rapidly). Great job and good luck! U3048330 (discusscontribs)


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very solid, thorough chapter which could be improved by perhaps providing less detail in the main body and expanding the book-ending (Overview and Conclusion) to emphasise the summary and take-home messages.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is very well considered and covered.
  2. Provide greater integration of theory in the Conclusion.
  3. Consider adding examples/case studies.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is very well considered and integrated into discussion of theory.
  2. Provide a stronger summary of research in the Conclusion.
  3. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context.
  4. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression was generally very good.
    1. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    2. The Conclusion is brief and could be improved by providing some more concrete, take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. (Excessive use of) coloured boxes was removed so as to aid accessibility/readability; strive for simple layout (e.g., as per Wikipedia articles)
    2. Add bullet-points for See also and External links
    3. Check and correct the structure with regard to heading levels (avoid having one sub-section in a section).
  3. Learning features
    1. External links need to address an international, not Australian, audience.
    2. Expand use of interwiki links to make the text more interactive.
    3. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Grammar and proofreading
    1. Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals').
  5. APA style
    1. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order.
    2. Add APA style captions to tables and figures.
    3. The APA style for the reference list is excellent.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:03, 23 November 2015 (UTC)


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well structured.
  2. Theory was well covered; research less so.
  3. Possibly there is too much material covered in three minutes to really take it all in; consider being more selective to highlight key points without having to rush.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is clear and slightly fast-paced.
  2. Visuals are clear and easy to read, although they are text-heavy - consider summarising the points and including more images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall, well produced.
  2. Clear title.
  3. Description is minimal but sufficient (contains link to chapter). Consider also providing a brief description field including the subtitle, license details, and image attributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:12, 26 November 2015 (UTC)