Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Caffeine and anxiety

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This looks like a great chapter, I love coffee and can't wait to see the finished product. I went through and edited the use of your in text citations. In APA 6, with three or more authors you place a comma before the use of the ampersand or "and"; for e.g. "Neil, Grant, and Crisp (2015) found that..." and (Neil, Grant, & Crisp, 2015). This type of citation guideline can be found on the bottom of page 132 of the "Interactive Approach to Writing Essays & Research Reports in Psychology" by Burton. Good luck with it! Ccgmjb (discusscontribs) 23:30, 8 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello, I love your chapter and Coffee! This might seem far fetched but could you consider social influences or pressures for drinking coffee? As part of the take home message section? Ccgmjb (discusscontribs) 05:44, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello just had another look at your chapter and it is developing greatly! :) Just checking with your grey tables should they be labeled table 1 and 2? As per APA 6? Also the key questions look great and focus your reader on what is expected in this chapter :) You also clearly describe the context and problem that needs answering in the introduction. Could a further section on the applied value of this knowledge be added? or a key take home message to wrap up this informative page? Ccgmjb (discusscontribs) 23:34, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello :) im just letting you know that i was looking at your page and i noticed that your picture of the coffee had the caption - caffeine is one of the most popular ways to consume caffeine. i just changed that to coffee is one of the most.... :) i thought that made more sense . Good luck with your chapter (3083783ro (discusscontribs) 02:09, 23 October 2015 (UTC)=u3083783)

Hi! I look forward to reading the final product of your page! It has always interested me the effect caffeine has on an individual, especially someone with anxiety. Just a thought, you could potentially discuss the different types of anxiety, say GAD and social anxiety, and if there is a significant difference in the effect it has depending on the disorder. Good luck :) (becc_z (discusscontribs)

Resources[edit source]

Hi there! Your page is looking really good, heaps of interesting information! Some graphs or even a quiz could be beneficial, I looked up some statistics that you could possibly use, there really was not much that I could found, but this website has a couple of graphs and some statistics that could be helpful: Caffeine Evaluation

Here is a link on the Australian food standards that has heaps of information on caffeine and the link to anxiety, just incase you needed more information. THE SAFETY ASPECTS OF DIETARY CAFFEINE

Good Luck :) --U3098499 (discusscontribs) 00:01, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:35, 21 October 2015 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a fantastic chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides an integrated, indepth, but very readable synthesis of psychological theory and research on the topic.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is excellent.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is excellent.
  2. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context.
  3. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression is excellent.
    1. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned).
  2. Layout is excellent.
    1. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. The chapter makes excellent use of interwiki links to other book chapters and to relevant Wikipedia articles.
    2. Add link nootropics chapter.
    3. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Spelling
    1. Eysneck -> Eysenck
  5. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent.
  6. APA style
    1. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations using et al..
    2. The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for seriated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:56, 25 November 2015 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well structured.
  2. An additional Overview/Intro slide and an additional Conclusion slide would help to top and tail the visual presentation and accompany the audio.
  3. How many coffees is 500mg (give some example/context).
  4. Material is well cited and illustrated.
  5. The Conclusion/take-away messages could be more explicit.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is clear and well-paced, but does sound a bit dry, as though being read from a script.
  2. Visuals are clear and easy to read.
  3. The combination of images and text is effective.
  4. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle.

is more descriptive and meaningful.

  1. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions).
  2. The sources for the images are indicated, but not the licenses - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images.
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).
  4. No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:30, 26 November 2015 (UTC)