Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Body modification and emotion

Heading formatting - keep it simple

FYI, I've stripped the chapter heading style back to the default - best to keep this simple e.g., as per Wikipedia style. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:57, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Hey I just wanted to suggest linking our chapters. My chapter is about elective plastic surgery. You may want to consider looking at plastic surgery as part of your topic. Looking forward to reading it :) Iga.leszczynska (discuss • contribs)

Just An Idea

Hey there, you could possibly delve into the difference between major/multiple modification versus simple/singular modification! Looks like it will be a good read!

Also tidying up your topics. I know there isn't a lot of info in there right now and it will probably sort itself out while your write it; but just making sure you're not repeating yourself as two of your headings are quite similar. --Woodsie335 (discuss • contribs) 11:08, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Suggestions

hello! What an interesting topic you have chosen! I am definitely looking forward to reading your book chapter soon. Just a few suggestions to help you with your chapter. Firstly, i would suggest you look at Kohut's theory of narcissistic self. It basically discusses how humans use the use of pain to reintegrate a fragmented self. ref: McLean, J. (2007). Psychotherapy with a Narcissistic Patient Using Kohut's Self Psychology Model. Psychiatry (Edgmont), 4(10), 40. Hewitt, K. (1997) Mutilating the body: identity in blood and ink. Bowling Green State University Press : Ohio.

In conjunction with that you could also maybe even incorporate a small quiz allowing people to answer questions on why the have modified their body and how it made/makes them feel. All the best! --U3034876 (discuss • contribs) 03:12, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a chapter which could be improved by . Overall, this is an excellent chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides an integrated, well considered, readable synthesis of psychological theory and research on the topic. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory is well covered and explained, with examples. The case studies were helpful. Research Research is well covered an explained. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Written expression Written expression is generally very good. Layout The chapter is well structured, with clear Overview and Conclusion sections. Convert word processing bullet points to wiki bullet points. Add bullet-points for See also and External links. Expand use of Tables and/or Figures. Learning features Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links Grammar and proofreading Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). APA style Add APA style captions to tables and figures. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:57, 24 November 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content A conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages could be helpful. Theory was well covered, but there is a lack of review of the top psychological research about BM and emotion. Communication Visuals are clear and easy to read. Audio volume varies somewhat between slides. Audio is well-paced. Consider using greater intonation to enhance engagement. Production quality Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions). The copyright licenses for some images may not allow reuse and hence there may have been copyright violation. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides). No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:14, 26 November 2015 (UTC)