Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Anxiety and weight

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Hello! I thought i would help you out by providing some weight disorders for you.

Weight disorders[edit source]

The DSM-5 proposes the following as weight disorders: anorexia nervosa, bulimia nervosa, binge eating disorder, pica, rumination disorder, evident/restrictive intake disorder, other specified feeding or eating disorder and unspecified feeding or eating disorder. The three most common eating disorder are anorexia nervosa, bulimia nervosa and binge eating disorder. anorexia nervosa is characterised by low weight, fear of gaining weight and an intense desire to be skinny and heavy food restrictions and limitations. Bulimia nervosa is characterised as an eating disorder with two parts; eating excessively large quantities and then purging (vomitting or taking laxatives). Binge eating disorder is characterised as eating excessively large quantities without purging afterwards. The references below you may find useful with further research! ref: Grilo, C. M. (2014). Eating and weight disorders. Psychology Press. Thompson, J. K., & Smolak, L. (Eds.). (2001). Body image, eating disorders, and obesity in youth: Assessment, prevention, and treatment. Taylor & Francis. Brownell, K. D., & Fairburn, C. G. (1995). Eating disorders and obesity: A comprehensive handbook. Guilford Press.

Goodluck and i look forward to reading your work :) --U3034876 (discusscontribs) 05:10, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter which could be improved by citing more original and recent sources (rather than old references that I doubt were consulted and websites). Also, add a Conclusion, and provide separate conclusions and clearer explanations for how anxiety may lead to weight loss or weight gain. Also make more clear how weight loss or gain may influence anxiety compaed to anxiety influencing weight gain or loss.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is reasonably well covered, although it could be made more clear how the James-Lange and Cannon-Bard theories apply to the topic/question.
  2. Addition of case studies or examples could be helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Did you consult sources such as Cannon (1927) and Dewey (1894)? If not, don't cite it.
  2. Use primary, peer-reviewed sources rather than secondary sources such as websites.
  3. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context.
  5. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression is reasonably good.
    1. Add a Conclusion with concrete, take-home messages.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. Some sentences are overly long.
    4. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where clarification templates have been added to the page).
  2. Layout
    1. Use default heading styles; remove bold
    2. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive.
    2. No tables or images were used.
    3. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Spelling
    1. Spelling could be improved - see the [spelling?] tags.
  5. APA style
    1. Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)).
    2. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:16, 1 December 2015 (UTC)

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter).
  2. The first minute or so is about anxiety - this could be abbreviated to allow greater focus on the question about the relationship between anxiety and weight.
  3. Theory was reasonably well covered.
  4. Consider covering more about research.
  5. Are the BMI charts actually helpful to this presentation (e.g., might they potentially heighten the anxiety of some people?)
  6. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Audio is quiet and well-paced.
  2. Increase font size (or zoom) to make text easier to read.
  3. Slides are simple, but reasonably clear. Some slides have too much text to easily digest.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Audio and slide changes are not auto-synced.
  2. Audio is quite quiet - review microphone set up.
  3. Description is empty, but transcript is usefully provided in commments.
  4. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions).
  5. The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides).
  7. No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:18, 3 December 2015 (UTC)