Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Anger and violent behaviour

Suggestions

1. I've made some edits here:[1]
2. Theory is looking stronger than Research at this stage
3. Written expression
   1. Work towards a great Overview (establishes the problem and focus questions) and Conclusion (emphasises the take-home message derived from psychological theory and research) - these are the two most important sections
   2. APA style - put multiple citations used in brackets in alphabetical order
   3. Interactivity - I added a link to Anger; consider linking other key words to useful Wikipedia articles

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:16, 3 November 2015 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonable, if somewhat brief/minimal chapter. Theory Theory is reasonably well covered, but could be covered in more depth. The addition of examples or case studies could be helpful. Research Several useful research studies are considered. More could be included and/or more detail about the reviewed studies could be provided. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is generally good. Avoid sections with only one paragraph. A section should have at least two paragraphs. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Some of the bullet-points should be rewritten into full paragraph format. Avoid sections with only one sub-section (have no sub-sections or more than one sub-section). Layout Add bullet-points for See also and External links See earlier comments about heading casing Use default heading styles; remove bold The chapter is well-structured. Learning features Consider incorporating more images. Add External links The chapter some use of interwiki links to relevant Wikipedia articles - also incorporate links to related book chapters. Expand quiz. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise) Grammar and proofreading Use abbreviations such as "e.g." inside brackets and "for example" outside brackets. APA style Check and correct use of et al. for in-text citations. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:44, 23 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Well structured. Theory and research are well covered. Include citations about evidence for claims. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful. Communication Audio is well-paced. Greater variation in intonation could enhance engagement. Audio volume/quality varies somewhat between slides. Increase font size to make text easier to read. The combination of images and text is effective. Highlight the practical, take-homes messages, perhaps with examples. Production quality A link to the presentation is not provided from book chapter (a link has now been added). Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter). Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or audio transcript). The copyright licenses and sources for the images used is not indicated - there may have been copyright violation unless you own the copyright to the images used or these were public domain images. A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides). No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:16, 3 December 2015 (UTC)