Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Altruism versus selfishness

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Hello, this looks like the beginnings of an interesting chapter! You could possibly add information about the Evolutionary perspective of Altruistic behaviours. Some theorists think that altruistic behaviours within the group and with others of the same species that resemble you could help you survive. This could be an innate reason for some altruistic behaviors Here is the DOI for one strong reference DOI: 10.1146/annurev.psych.59.103006.093625 Good Luck Ccgmjb (discuss • contribs) 06:52, 7 October 2015 (UTC)

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Hello. Your chapter topic is very interesting! I think your chapter will be really cool and informative. I would suggest incorporating the evolutionary perspective and also the behaviour perspective as possible theories to help explain altruism versus selfishness. [w:Evolution|Evolution] theory discusses how behaviour is similar of all groups of beings from the same species. Additionally, the [w:Biological theory| Biological theory] views altruism and selfish behaviour as innate and predisposed to individuals. I found some articles below which may help you with your chapter.

ref: Fehr, E., & Fischbacher, U. (2003). The nature of human altruism. Nature, 425(6960), 785-791. Becker, G. S. (1981). Altruism in the Family and Selfishness in the Market Place. Economica, 1-15. Margolis, H. (1984). Selfishness, altruism, and rationality. University of Chicago Press. Wilson, D. S. (1992). On the relationship between evolutionary and psychological definitions of altruism and selfishness. Biology and Philosophy, 7(1), 61-68.

Best of luck and I look forward to reading your chapter. --U3034876 (discuss • contribs) 09:26, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably solid chapter. Its strength is theory, although this could be addressed in more depth, but it is somewhat lacking in use of the best research. The quality of written expression is mediocre. There is some use of the wiki environment, but more could also be made of this. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory The material about the Mbuti people) was unreferenced!? Research The research discussed was generally from several decades ago. What does more recent research indicated? Written expression Written expression Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the tags Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned) Check/correct punctuation (e.g., several statements need commas to be grammatically correct). The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview which briefly outlines the theories/research used. Avoid starting so many sentences with a source's author or date, unless this is particularly pertinent. Provide the citation at the end of the sentence instead. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., where clarification templates have been added to the page). Use gender-neutral language (e.g., man-made -> human-made) Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., "we") Layout Use default heading styles; remove bold Add bullet-points for See also and External links Some images are used, but the chapter could be improved by adding more images. No tables were used. Learning features More interwiki links could be added to make the text more interactive (e.g., Mbuti people). There is minimal use of images or tables. Spelling Some spelling could be improved - see the tags Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise) Grammar and proofreading The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) APA style Add hanging indent for references Remove issue numbers for seriated journal references.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:49, 18 November 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a novel video presentation that could be improved by reducing the amount of theory, including a research review, and incorporating more examples. Structure and content Theory was ... somewhat tedious (one listed after another) - perhaps highlight and illustrate the key theory/ies to allow more scope for reviewing research. Use gender neutral language - mankind -> humankind A conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages could be helpful. Communication Well-paced. The male presenter used excellent intonation to create engagement. Production quality Love the "newsy" introduction/conclusion - catchy, engaging. Rename the title (remove student number and unit name/number etc. - such details could go in the description.)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:06, 25 November 2015 (UTC)