Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Weight loss motivation in overweight children

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just one thing

Hey, so I've had a chance to have a quick look over your chapter, it flows really well!

Just one pointer I have, which I'm sure you'll address through your editing it just to make sure your formatting is neat, i quickly edited it so the motivating the parent subheading flows into the next paragraph, plus one quick spelling change.

Good luck!! --Charlotte.C (discuss • contribs) 14:14, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

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Overall This is a very good presentation on an important and very relevant issue. Well done! Structure and content The structure is very clear, with a logical flow throughout. Discussing adolescent males and females separately was very useful. Theories are integrated throughout. Research is also included, but is often not directly referred to. A good, succinct conclusion is provided. Some illustrative examples are used. Communication Communication is a strength of this presentation. The voice-over is appropriately paced, with good expression and pauses where necessary. The slides are nicely put together, with a good amount of text included on each. Some images are used. Production quality Basic production tools are used effectively in this presentation. The audio quality is generally good. There is some background sound in the microphone. Quality of visuals are good. The presentation has a professional feel. A link to the book chapter is provided. Copyright license information is provided.

ShaunaB (discuss • contribs) 02:42, 19 November 2014 (UTC)

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Overall This is a comprehensive, interesting, practical chapter and serves an excellent example. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below. Theory The target audience is international; so the article should be de-Australianised or the title/topic revised. An appropriate breadth and depth of theoretical approaches are explained. Case studies provide excellent illustrations. Research Research is well integrated. More details about key research studies could be provided. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is generally good. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout Level 3 headings should be used as the level below Level 2 headings Tables and/or Figures were used effectively. Learning features Some relevant in-text links are provided; more could be added. Spelling and grammar are very good. APA style is very good. APA style Figure and Table captions need to be added. Remove issue numbers for seriated journal references.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:36, 28 November 2014 (UTC)