Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Video games and positive motivation

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Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

Overall, this is an interesting and well delivered presentation. Nicely done!

Structure and content[edit source]

The structure is well-formed, and the flow between ideas is good. Research is the primary focus of the presentation, giving it a solid academic quality. The research in this area is also very interesting, so it was nice to get a good in-depth explanation. Theory is less of a focus, and this is an area for improvement. The concluding statements were strong and gave a nice (and still appropriate) personal touch to the presentation.

Communication[edit source]

Communication through the voice-over is a strength of this presentation. The voice-over is well paced, with good intonation and pauses between sentences and slides. It was engaging for the listener. The use of a range of images to re-enforce the information being provided verbally is a nice way of presenting it. However, an area for improvement could be to integrate at least some text in order to emphasise important pieces of information (e.g. conclusions, defining areas of research).

Production quality[edit source]

The production is basic but good. All images, as well as the voice over, are clear and adequate. A link to the book chapter is provided. Copyright license information is provided. The presentation would have a more professional feel if some text was used to portray at least the important pieces of information.

ShaunaB - Talk

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:08, 3 December 2014 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter in that it addresses the topic using relevant psychological theory and research. this is a chapter which could be improved by . For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. The chapter is strengthened by well constructed Overview and Conclusion sections.
  2. Addition of case studies or additional examples could be helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Several very relevant studies are explained.
  2. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of the effects.
  3. The Reeve (2009) textbook is overused as a citation; use primary peer-reviewed sources.
  4. Some claims are not supported by citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression is generally good.
    1. Some paragraphs are overly long.
  2. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links could be added to relevant Wikipedia articles to make the text more interactive.
    2. Effective links are provided to other relevant book chapters on Wikiversity.
  3. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling.
  4. APA style
    1. Check and correct the APA style for figure captions.
    2. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations (e.g., "(Beale et al. 2007)(Cole, Yoo & Knutson, 2012)" -> "(Beale et al. 2007; Cole, Yoo & Knutson, 2012)".
    3. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:08, 3 December 2014 (UTC)