Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Social media motivation and gender

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Hi, Good layout of the page so far, just thought I'd let you know that i'm currently editing Social Media Motivation - What motivates social media usage and I've linked your page onto my demographics section. Feel free to reference my page as well, your overview could possibly explain that your chapter will expand on mine by segregating the users of social mediaCan Rogerthat (discusscontribs) 06:24, 20 October 2014 (UTC)--Can Rogerthat (discusscontribs) 06:24, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:56, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

Some ideas for theories etc.[edit source]

Hey, great idea to look at gender differences for social media usage. I was just thinking it could be interesting to look at something like self-determination theory perhaps? Focusing on motivation for relatedness with others? You could even look at if there is a gender difference in the type of relatedness men and women are after - e.g. whether they use social media mainly for dating or maintaining friendships, or staying in touch with family? Anyway, just a couple of thoughts. You may want to look at a different aspect of course! Good luck :)

APA style captions for images and tables[edit source]

I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:46, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Hanging indents[edit source]

Hey! This looks great, so perfectly laid out and really interesting (and relevant!) Just noticed at the end in your references that some of them aren't hanging indents, just a few at the end :) fix that up and its perfect!! :) -- (discuss) 10:27, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this presentation uses basic tools to create a basic online presentation, but there are several respects in which it could be improved.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The presentation structure is OK, but the coverage of content is overly detailed. Understanding could be better fostered by presenting simpler explanations of the key theory illustrated by research studies and/or examples.
  2. There is much more emphasis on theory than there is on research. More of a balance would be preferable.
  3. The presentation lacks Overview and Conclusion slides; it needs some big picture book-ending

Communication[edit source]

  1. Basic presentation using screencast and slides with dot points; no images or tables.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Audio quality is borderline satisfactory due to white noise and somewhat muffled and their are cut-off audio jumps between slides.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:49, 3 December 2014 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic chapter which could be improved by abbreviating the general material and expanding the material on the specific topic of focus.

Theory[edit source]

  1. In the Overview, establish why the topic is important. (Currently the Overview doesn't explain the relationship between gender and social media usage is important).
  2. The logic for using of Deci and Ryan's theoretical approach to motivation as a tool to explain gender in social media use isn't clearly explained. Why use this theoretical approach?
  3. Abbreviate the general theoretical material about motivation and social media as separate concepts and link to articles with further information (i.e., significantly truncate the first half of the chapter).
  4. The "Motives to use social media platforms" section lacks in-text citations
  5. The strongest, most relevant section is "How does social role theory relate to gender’s use of social media?". This section is most directly related back to the topic and uses theory and research.
  6. The case studies were helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. The Reeve (2009) textbook is overused as a citation; use primary peer-reviewed sources.
  2. There are several important claims which are not supported by citations (e.g., about gender differences in social media usage).

Written expression[edit source]

  1. The presentation is over the maximum word-count.
  2. Some paragraphs are overly long.
  3. Change the external Wikipedia links to internal links.
  4. See earlier comments about heading casing.
  5. Use Australian spelling.
  6. Check and correct the use/non-use of ownership apostrophes.
  7. Check APA style for how to report numbers.
  8. Check and correct use of "&" vs. "and"
  9. Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., "we")
  10. The reference list is not in full APA style
  11. Figures need renumbering as one image was deleted due to copyright issues.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:34, 3 December 2014 (UTC)