Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Self-compassion and well-being

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Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:20, 23 October 2014 (UTC)


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is clear and concise presentation. Well done!

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The structure is quite good. The flow is logical, but could be a little more fluid. The presentation could also be improved by providing an overview of content at the beginning.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Communication is good. The voice-over is well paced, with appropriate expression. Visually, ideas are presented clearly. Slightly more detail could be included on the slides in order to make the presentation more dynamic.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Production quality is very good. Audibooo and visuals are both of a high quality. The use of Prezi gives a professional feel. The audio cutting in and out is slightly distracting.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very well constructed and considered chapter. It demonstrates a high level of knowledge about the topic and communicates this effectively to an every day self-help audience, drawing on both theory and research. See comments below and these copyedits for more detailed feedback.

Theory[edit source]

  1. An appropriate range of theoretical perspectives are considered, and integrated with research, leading to practical suggestions. Very good understanding of the topic and relevant theory included.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is well covered and claims are well cited.
  2. When describing research findings, indicate the size and the direction (e.g., positive or negative) of effects.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. The chapter is well written. The style is easy to follow and understand.
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    2. The chapter benefits from a well developed Overview and Conclusion.
  2. Learning features
    1. Some interwiki links are provided, but there could be more e.g., Buddism, mindfulness, self-esteem etc.
    2. Excellent inclusion of self-compassion quiz
    3. Links to more info about the different types of meditation would be more interactive
    4. Inclusion of practical exercises was excellent - did you make them up or should sources be cited?
    5. The description of Mindful Self-Compassion Program with a case study is also excellent / very useful
    6. More images could be used.
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Use Australian spelling e.g., conceptualize -> conceptualise
    2. Check abbreviation formatting - eg -> e.g., ie -> i.e.,
  4. APA style
    1. Use et al. on subsequent citations of sources with three or more authors
    2. Use APA style captions for figures
    3. Numbers under 10 should be written in words e.g. five; numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers
    4. The reference list is not in APA style (check capitalisation and APA style)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:01, 11 November 2014 (UTC)