Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Reticular formation, arousal and emotion

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:07, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

Contributions

Hi there, I was doing some research & found this article which may be beneficial for your book chapter: Arousal of cerebral cortex electroencephalogram consequent to high-frequency stimulation of ventral medullary reticular formation. http://web.b.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=7&sid=bd456765-82c0-431e-9c3a-242cec846123%40sessionmgr115&hid=125&bdata=#db=a9h&AN=27870372

Comments

Well done so far. Your information was VERY informative yet easy to read. It flowed effortlessly and the headings were in a logical order. I suspect you have not finished yet but it would be good if you could add some colour and diagrams to compliment your writing and make it a bit more appealing. I also found the "putting it all together" topic clever and thought it was an effective yet informal way to wrap up your chapter and it may be something that i employ. Goodluck with the rest of your work. JacquelineSpence (discuss • contribs) 08:21, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall An interesting and well delivered presentation. Well done. Structure and content The structure is clear, and the flow is logical. Research is well integrated throughout. Theory is less of a focus, and this is an area for potential improvement. An overview is provided at the beginning of the presentation. An informal conclusion is provided. Communication Communication is good. The voice-over is adequately paced, with good expression and pauses between sentences and slides. An appropriate level of information is provided on the slides. The design of the slides is very basic. The use of more figures and colours would help to make them more engaging. Production quality Basic production tools are used effectively. The audio quality is good, although there is a dull 'hum' in the background. The visuals are clear. A link to the book chapter is provided. Image copyright licence information is provided.

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Overall Overall, this was an impressive chapter because it presents relevant motivation and emotion theory and knowledge about a specific brain region in a readable and accessible manner. The second part of the chapter seemed to lose the RF-thread, however. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below. Theory Key concepts were explained in the initial parts of the chapter. The theoretical groundwork for understanding the role of the RF is emotion is well structured in the first parts of the chapter. The content in the second half of the chapter (i.e. arousal and emotion) is not as clearly related to the RF as the content in the first half of the chapter. Research Several relevant research studies are described in good detail. There was an over-reliance on the Reeve (2009) textbook as a citation; ideally, use primary, peer-reviewed sources. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Some statements were unreferenced - see the tags Written expression Written expression In general, the chapter is well written and well prepared. The quality of written expression could be improved where clarification templates have been added to the page. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout Figures were used effectively. Perhaps it could help the reader to provide more detailed figures which depict the relevant RF pathways. Learning features The text could become more interactive by including interwiki links. Some links to Wikipedia articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links Spelling, grammar and proofreading Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise) The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the tags APA style References are not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:27, 28 November 2014 (UTC)