Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Resisting the temptation of unhealthy food

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hey, first things that come to mind when I read this topic is the perception that other's have when they see you consuming bad food. I know that personally this is something that makes me refrain from eating bad food (particularly in front of strangers). I also wonder whether a person's self esteem or weight plays a part - e.g. if they feel bad about themselves already would they be more likely to eat bad food, or would this motivate them to eat healthier to make them feel better about themselves? The theories and current research on this would also be interesting to read about, especially whether there is much difference in countries where obesity is prevalent (USA, Australia) compared to other cultures where malnutrition is a huge problem (e.g. Africa)...Food for thought!

user:smelle24 21:34, 16 October 2014

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So when I came across your chapter I had just stuffed down cheesecake, before dinner knowing that I would feel so guilty after! and I thought I need to read this chapter. so I see your just getting started so what I point out will probably be obvious... prob add a reference in the introduction when you say that bad food leads to obesity part. And like mentioned above it will be interesting to see where this is more prevalent.. western societies? poor nations I can imagine not? all the best! I will check it out later. --Dsalvestro (discuss • contribs) 07:52, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a well developed presentation. Only the first 5 minutes of the presentation was examined. Structure and content The structure is clear, and is outlined at the beginning of the presentation. The inclusion of some scientific information is useful. The presentation is primarily descriptive. Research is integrated, but is not a primary focus. Theory is not sufficiently incorporated. Illustrative examples could have been more effectively incorporated. Communication Communication is generally well done. The voice-over is well paced, with good intonation and pauses between sentences. The slides are nicely developed. Some slides could have included some more text (e.g. 'Why do we eat unhealthy food?'). Images are included. Production quality Basic production tools are used. The presentation exceeds the 5 minute time limit. The audio quality is good. Quality of the visuals is also good. A link to the book chapter is provided. No copyright license information is provided.

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonable chapter which could be considerably strengthened by incorporating better citations to support claims. For more feedback, see these copyedits and comments below. Theory Unhealthy food doesn't seem to be clearly defined. The motivational material used is generally quite broad; there is room for focusing on more specific theory and studies related to motivations for eating different types of foods. Research Relatively little research about eating motivations is described in detail. The case study (Baumeister experiment) is a notable exception - more of this would be ideal. Many statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is reasonable. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., where clarification templates have been added to the page). Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout As per earlier comment, coloured boxes were removed to aid readability; keep the style simple (e.g., as per Wikipedia articles) A few images are used; more detailed captions to explain the connection between the image and the text would be helpful. No tables were used. Learning features Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise) Grammar and proofreading Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals') APA style Add APA style captions to tables and figures. Direct quotes need page numbers. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10) The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:17, 7 December 2014 (UTC)