Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Parenting styles and adolescent emotion

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Feedback[edit source]

Hi, really interesting topic I enjoyed the read! I like have you included a diverse range of theories in your topic.. My only suggestion really would be to go into more depth into some other areas such as how drug use can influence the parenting style or the adolescent? As well as a visual displays! But overall great work!--U3069714 (discusscontribs) 07:23, 26 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:17, 27 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Editing tip - Linking to Wikipedia articles[edit source]

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Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

This presentation is well structured, and informative. Much of the information is taken directly from the book chapter. Remember that the purpose of this task is to provide an overview of the book chapter, with viewers having the option to view the book chapter for more in-depth information.

As the presentation exceeds the time limit, only the first 5 minutes have been taken into consideration when marking.

Structure and content[edit source]

The structure is clear, and the flow between ideas if logical. Theory and research are both a primary focus, giving the presentation a sound academic quality. No illustrative examples are used.

Communication[edit source]

The voice-over uses appropriate expression. It is slightly too fast in areas. The flow is interrupted at the beginning of most slides with 'filler' words (e.g. "um" or "ok"). The slides generally contain too much information. Remember to choose only the most important points to re-enforce. It is best not to read directly from slides.

Production quality[edit source]

The presentation exceeds the 5 minute time limit. Basic production tools are used effectively. The audio quality is quite good. The visuals are clear. A link to the book chapter is provided. Copyright license information is provided.

ShaunaB (discusscontribs) 03:38, 19 November 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic chapter which could be improved by focusing less on the separate constructs (parenting styles and emotion) and more on their inter-relation. The quality of written expression. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory about the separate constructs (parenting styles, emotion, adolescence) should be summarised and more emphasis should be placed on explaining how and why parenting styles may affect short- and longer-term emotional experience.

Research[edit source]

  1. The most useful/relevant research is described towards the end of the chapter; ideally this material would be incorporated earlier and expanded.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit source]

  1. The quality of written expression could be improved where clarification templates have been added to the page.
  2. Layout
    1. Several edits were made to correct/simplify the layout; more could be done e.g. remove the "big" tags from headings and remove the roundboxes (to aid with accessibility/readability)
    2. Put external links into an external links section at the end
    3. See earlier comments about heading casing
    4. Tables and/or Figures should be used to help illustrate key points.
  3. Learning features
    1. Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links
    2. One or more case studies could be helpful.
  4. Spelling, grammar and proofreading could be improved.
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
    2. Spelling could be improved - see the [spelling?] tags
    3. Use Australian spelling e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise
    4. Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'
    5. Use abbreviations such as "e.g." inside brackets and "for example" outside brackets
  5. APA style for the references could be improved by applying italics, correcting capitalisation, and removing issue numbers for seriated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:52, 27 November 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]