Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Neuroticism and emotion

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Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:14, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, good attempt on an interesting topic, well done.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. There was a nice effort to include both theory and research. For improvement, a clearer description of the concept of neuroticism would enhance, as well as some more discussion of research studies.

Communication[edit]

  1. Overall, Jing created a simple but effective visual presentation, well done. For improvement, the pace between slides could be slightly quicker, and the use of a case study or real life example might help to further engage the viewer

Production quality[edit]

  1. Visual quality was sound, however the sound quality had some issues. Relevant link, licensing and referencing must also be included, thus this presentation likely violates copyright law. Courtney.Bruce (discusscontribs) 03:46, 23 November 2014 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this chapter succeeds in providing a basic overview of relations between neuroticism and emotion. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below.

Theory[edit]

  1. There is too much emphasis on general explanations of neuroticism and emotion as separate concepts, and not enough emphasis on the theoretical relationship.
  2. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Research[edit]

  1. There is too much emphasis on research about neuroticism and emotion as separate concepts, and not enough emphasis on research evidence about the relationship.
  2. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the direction and size of effects.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Obtaining comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
    2. The Overview is quite general; it would benefit by becoming more specific e.g., by establishing some focus questions and/or providing an example/case study. Similarly, the Conclusion lacks precision - e.g., what are the take-home messages about neuroticism and emotion.
    3. Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    4. Some statements could be written more clearly - see the [Rewrite to improve clarity] tags
  2. Learning features
    1. The text could become more interactive by including interwiki links, more images, tables, and/or a quiz.
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading could be improved
    1. Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., researchers vs. researchers' vs. researcher's
    2. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
  4. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing
  5. APA style
    1. Check correctedness of in-text citation formatting e.g., ( Mischel, 2004) -> (Mischel, 2004), (Costa et.al., 1986) -> (Costa et al., 1986)
    2. Reference list capitalisation needs correction for APA style.
    3. Did you consult Eysenck (1967)? If not, don't cite it.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:18, 24 November 2014 (UTC)