Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Muscle dysmorphia (The Adonis Complex) and motivation

Heading casing

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Peer review

Hey, it looks like your chapter will be very interesting! I'm looking forward to reading it when it is done :) I noticed that you have two definition sections; "What exactly is "Muscle Dysmorphia"? and "What is Motivation" I have received some feedback on my own page that suggested cutting out definition sections and to instead add links to other pages that will explain that concept for you. For example like this: motivation. I think there may have also been a moodle post about cutting out definition sections. Doing this will give you more room to discuss the question you are trying to answer. Good luck! --U3053066 (discuss • contribs) 18:42, 24 October 2014 (UTC)

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Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. If you wish to dispute the marks, see the suggested marking dispute process.

Overall Overall, this is a basic but sufficient presentation. Structure and content The structure is clear. Theories are integrated, with some supporting research being presented. Are there theories developed specifically for muscle dysmorphia? Research could have been more of a focus. The differentiation between intrinsic and extrinsic motivation was useful. Formal overview and conclusion slides could improve the presentation. Also, some information on treatment for muscle dysmorphia could be useful, and give the presentation a more practical feel. Communication The voice-over is well paced. More expression could be used in order to make it more engaging. It comes across as casual in sections. Try to include only dot points on slides, to highlight the most important points. This will help to avoid reading directly from slides and will also effectively re-enforce the information being delivered verbally. Production quality Basic production tools are used effectively. The audio quality is adequate, but has some echo. Quality of visuals is generally good. Some text is too small and appears 'fuzzy'. A link back to the book chapter is not provided.

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Overall Overall, this is a solid, well-written, interesting chapter. It could be improved by enhancing the focus on a self-help audience (e.g., what can we all do to lead happier, healthier lives). Theory is well covered; research less on. For more feedback, see these copyedits and comments below. Theory Provide more coverage of the theoretical aspects of the chapter in the Overview. Use DSM-V rather than DSM-IV More detail about the BDD and MD characteristics could be described (e.g., perhaps a case study would be a useful addition). What are the gender prevalence rates for these conditions? Which parts of the body are typically of most concern? Research Describing more details of relevant research would be helpful. The chapter makes effective use of in-text citations. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Avoid one paragraph sections. A section should have at least two paragraphs. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., where clarification templates have been added to the page). The conclusion is weak; provide more detail about the take-home messages. Layout There was minimal use of Tables and/or Figures. Learning features The chapter makes some use of interwiki links; more could be added. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. APA style Add APA style captions to tables and figures. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10) Put in-text citations in alphabetical order. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:48, 7 December 2014 (UTC)