Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Monogamy motivation

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Hi Alex i think this is a really great topic. you could possibly look into the theory that women like to stay in long term relationships more as opposed as they need someone to care and provide for their children and men would perhaps cheat more as they have to sow their seeds.--Hynes08 (discuss • contribs) 03:28, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

Hi this looks great! I agree with the above comment, I've been learning about those theories in one of my other courses and I think it would be an interesting direction to take this in! look forward to reading it when its completed U3068859 (discuss • contribs) 07:36, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

Hey, this is a really interesting chapter. I particularly like the discussion of the history of monogamy and how it slowly permeated Western culture until it was considered the norm. I thought the structure of your writing was easy to follow and developed well. One thing I would love to know more about is the studies you have mentioned in the 'Psychology' section. It would be relevant to the rest of your text if you mentioned when and where the studies were done, and how the data was collected - for example, did they ask a bunch of random people in the street or was this collected from marriage counselling or interviews etc. I love that you put in a link to the attachment style quiz - everyone likes quizzes! --U3090859 (discuss • contribs) 03:30, 25 October 2014 (UTC)

Hey, i really enjoyed reading this chapter! it was an easy, yet stimulating read. i was significantly interested in your background research on religion and marriage as well as a contemporary and social look at monogamy. i also agree with the comment above mine about, as i would also like to know more about the studies you mentioned in the psychology section. if the studies mentioned are as interesting as your chapter it should result in a very captivating and informative read. Great Work and Good Luck

--irwin13 (discuss • contribs) 08:35, 27 October 2014

Layout

Hi, just suggesting taking all the information and making it more eye catching and appealing. Information is irrelevant if no attention is being payed. Some time should be spend on the layout of the information.

U3068311 (discuss • contribs)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:27, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

APA referencing

The unit outline recommends that referencing be in APA style, even though it is a Wikipedia page! This means that instead of numbers, the author's surname and the publishing year should be in brackets; e.g. (Mead, 2014). All the details can be found here: http://canberra.libguides.com/content.php?pid=238252&sid=1966106 --U3090859 (discuss • contribs) 03:49, 25 October 2014 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an impressive presentation – well done! Structure and content A well designed and organised presentation which provides a very good overview of what motivates monogamy. The presentation displayed logical flow between concepts related to the topic, as well as good understanding, explanation and integration of both theory and related research – very impressive. Overall very interesting content and linkage to research on gender differences. As there is quite a lot of content covered an initial explanation of the presentation's structure would be helpful to the viewer. In text referencing and an end of text reference list would also have improved the presentation. A useful summary is provided at the end of the presentation. Communication Clear communication of ideas using voice and image was displayed. The presentation was well-paced and engaging and displayed good use of colour, images and diagrams. The presentation could perhaps be made more engaging for the viewer by using case examples or additional illustrative examples. Production quality The presentation had clear picture and audio quality and demonstrated effective use of a basic production tool to communicate ideas. Audio quality however could have been improved as there is some background noise (white noise, static and clicking of the mouse). The presentation sounded scripted, however, well-rehearsed with little to no mistakes made. A standard youtube license is provided. A link is provided from the book chapter to the presentation, however, no link is provided from the presentation to the book chapter. No image attributions or references are provided.

RenaeLN (discuss • contribs) 07:13, 21 November 2014 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter. For more feedback, see these copyedits and comments below. Theory Evolutionary, parental investment, social exchange and cross-cultural theories are all well described and are relevant. The historical context is very well researched and described. Research Research studies could be described in more detail. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is very good. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Avoid one paragraph sections. A section should have at least two paragraphs. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned) Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Some coloured boxes were removed to aid readability; keep the style simple (e.g., as per Wikipedia articles) Learning features The chapter makes excellent use of interwiki links. Spelling Grammar and proofreading The grammar of some sentences need to be improved (e.g., see the tags) Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals') APA style Add APA style captions to tables and figures. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:16, 2 December 2014 (UTC)