Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Loving-kindness meditation and emotion
I noticed that you had your APA format wrong for your references so i fixed it. you had the title in italics instead of the journal name and volume number, also you wrote vol.8 instead of just writing 8 --Hynes08 (discuss • contribs) 01:11, 21 October 2014 (UTC)
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Hey! Here's that graph I helped you upload :) Just copy and paste the syntax and pop it where you would like it!
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Just had a read through of your page - it is coming along really well! I have a suggestion though (and completely ok to disregard it), Maybe the introduction paragraph could be moved into the overview section??
With this sentence: "what Loving-kindness Meditation is and what if any effect this practice has on emotion" is it effect or affect? James posted this link a while ago on how to know when to use effect and when to use affect: http://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/affect-versus-effect... and from reading this I have a feeling it might be 'affect' - but then again I get really confused with both. So maybe worth double checking??
Also, I made some minor edits with some grammar throughout and noticed you wanted to provided links here: neurotransmitter systems(link), as well as the autonomic nervous system (link) and the endocrine system (link)" - so I went ahead and linked them for you (I hope that is ok?! and hope that's what you wanted them linked to - if not please change them!!). There was also another part further down "(left-sided anterior)(link)" under the heading Loving-kindness meditation and the brain, I was going to link this for you but wasn't sure what you wanted to link it to so left it and just thought I would remind you it is there.
Overall, a really interesting read so far!
I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see http://libguides.newcastle.edu.au/content.php?pid=113807&sid=1208571 -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:33, 23 October 2014 (UTC)
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A really nicely developed presentation. The 4 mantras are great! Well done.
Research and theory are appropriate addressed. The structure is good. The balance between academic content (i.e. theories and research), and practical information is well achieved. Good definitions are provided in order to set-up the presentation.
Communication is a strength of this presentation. The voice-over is well paced, with good intonation and pauses between sentences and slides. It is engaging and warm (nicely complimenting the topic!). Important information is well selected and presented on the slides. Some images are included, however there is room for more.
Basic production tools are used effectively. The audio quality is good. There is some background noise at points. The visuals are clear. A link back to the chapter is provided and referred to. Image source information is provided.
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This is a promising chapter which provides a reasonable overview of theory and research about the emotional effects of LKM. For more feedback, see these copyedits and comments below.