Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Gambling addiction and emotion
Heading casing[edit source]
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your structure[edit source]
Hi, some comments on your structure.
The five questions sound familiar, did you take them from the textbook? Even if you did not, I think you spent too much space on introducing emotion. You only need to discuss emotion in the introduction part where you introduce gambling. The focus of your chapter is on how does gambling influence emotion/ or how does emotion influence gambling? Some related theory concerning gambling could be introduced to understand this behaviour.
Also, important: recreational gambling and problem gambling. I guess when it is not problem gambling, recreational gambling could have some positive effect on emotions. Problem gambling and its negative impact should be discussed. --Xlc (discuss • contribs) 10:41, 23 October 2014 (UTC)
I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see http://libguides.newcastle.edu.au/content.php?pid=113807&sid=1208571 -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:32, 23 October 2014 (UTC)
Couple of edits[edit source]
I just edited a couple of your headings to correct the caps. Hope that's ok!
I noticed you've got some random syntax just above your Reference list area. I had a look, but I couldn't easily see how to correct it. You may want to take a look.
I also noticed you've got 2 random links down the bottom. If they are your External links you may want to put a heading in and create links.
Referencing style[edit source]
Coloured backgrounds[edit source]
Coloured backgrounds make it more difficult for people with visual disabilities to read the text. I recommend removing these e.g., there are no coloured backgrounds used in Wikipedia articles. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:42, 26 October 2014 (UTC)
Physical ordering of page[edit source]
Hi! I really like the structure of your chapter's contents, it flows really well from point to point, and is all grouped together really well. The only thing about the ordering I would request you change is the having two columns of text the whole way down. It does make it interesting visually, but I don't feel like it would work as well in an online page (it would in a physical book). It's just slightly difficult keeping track of where you are when you have to scroll up and down all the time, and it does not flow like the table of contents lists it out. Great work content-wise though :) ZombrexJim (discuss • contribs)
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An engaging voice-over is the highlight of this presentation.
The structure could be improved. A good overview is provided at the beginning of the presentation, but beyond this, the flow is sometimes difficult to follow. It ends somewhat abruptly, and providing some kind of conclusion could prevent this. Some illustrative examples are incorporated. Theory is well incorporated. Research could be more of a focus.
The voice-over is well paced, with a warm and engaging tone. The make-up of the slides was inconsistent, making it difficult to follow in parts.Remember to include important information on the slides. For example, some of the statistics presented around adolescent gambling could have been written out.
Basic production tools are used adequately. The audio is quite 'fuzzy'. Quality of visuals are good. A link back to the book chapter is not provided. No copyright license information is provided.
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