Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Fear and coping

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Comments[edit source]

Hey Pat3068181, have you thought about reappraisal as a coping strategy? I'm currently working on appraisal - how a persons interpretation or explanation of a given situation leads to emotion and I think cognitive reappraisal could be another coping strategy you could talk about. It is an emotion regulation strategy that involves changing the trajectory of an emotional response by reinterpreting the meaning of the emotional stimulus. Other then that though, your chapter looks really good, maybe just make sure you also proof read, there were just a few grammatical errors. Rach

--U3068899 (discusscontribs) 12:34, 25 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

Overall, this is a well delivered presentation. Well done.

Structure and content[edit source]

The structure is clear, and the flow logical. Theory and research is very nicely explored throughout - well done! The definitions provided, particularly around coping, are really well articulated and set the scene nicely for the second half of the presentation. Introductory and concluding slides would have improved the presentation.

Communication[edit source]

The voice-over is clear, with good expression. It is slightly too fast throughout. The slides are basic, but effective, and images are used well to re-enforce the information being provided.

Production quality[edit source]

Basic production tools are used to an adequate level. Quality of visuals are good. The audio quality is generally good, with some peaking in sections (i.e. too loud). A link to the book chapter is provided. Copyright license information is provided.

ShaunaB - Talk

Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:47, 27 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonable chapter. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Some of the discussed theories lacked clear relationship to the focus of the chapter - how people cope with fear e.g., it isn't clear from the chapter what the relevance of Object Relations Theory is to coping with fear.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research studies directly related to the topic could be discussed in more detail.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression was generally good.
    1. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. The Conclusion should provide more concrete take-home messages e.g., answers to the focus questions established in the Overview.
  2. Learning features
    1. Several images were used; no tables
    2. Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links. More interwiki links could be added.
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Use Australian spelling e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise
    2. Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'
  4. APA style
    1. Add APA style captions to tables and figures.
    2. Check APA for citations with six or more authors.
    3. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)
    4. The reference list is not in full APA style.
    5. Apply hanging indent to all references, rather than to each reference separately

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:47, 27 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]