Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Eyewitness memory and emotion

very impressed

Hi, i'm very impressed with this piece - it seems you're really on top of it so early! I made some very very minor proof read edits to some of the sentences that I think help with the overall flow. Also went through your reference to see if I could pick up on any bits you missed out and there was a only a few full stops and some italicisation missing that I fixed for you. All in all I think you've done a great job. Joelthebaws (discuss • contribs)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:06, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

APA style captions for images and tables

I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see http://libguides.newcastle.edu.au/content.php?pid=113807&sid=1208571 -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:32, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. Well done. Structure and content The structure is clear, however the flow could be improved. Remember to include linking sentences to transition smoothly from one idea to the next. Research and theory are a primary focus of the presentation. A clear summary is provided to conclude the presentation. Illustrative examples are not included. Communication Communication is well done. The voice-over is clear, with good expression and pauses between sentences and slides. The slides are nicely put together. Images are used only in transition slides, and this does not allow the viewer to see them properly. They could be included on the slides with text. Production quality Basic production tools are used. The audio quality is sufficient, although there is some peaking. The visuals are clear. A link to the book chapter is provided.

ShaunaB (discuss • contribs) 04:03, 19 November 2014 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter. The chapter could be improved by focusses less on eyewitness memory in general and more on eyewitness memory and emotion. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below. Theory Theory about eyewitness memory is well covered. Theory about emotion, however, is less well covered. Research The chapter has a strong research focus. The balance is probably too much towards research and not enough towards theory and practical application. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression In general, the written expression was very good. The overview could benefit from including an example and introducing the key topics to be discussed in more detail. Perhaps focus questions could also be established. The conclusion could be improved by providing a summary of key points and emphasising the take-home, practical messages. The quality of written expression could be improved where clarification templates have been added to the page. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Figures were used effectively. Learning features The quiz doesn't include any questions about emotion and eyewitness memory which is the main purpose of the chapter. The initial parts of the chapter provide some relevant links to Wikiversity and/or Wikiversity pages. More such links could be added to other parts of the chapter. Spelling, grammar and proofreading was generally very good. APA style is very good. Add APA style captions to tables and figures Remove issue numbers for seriated journal references.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:29, 26 November 2014 (UTC)