Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Exercise motivation

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Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:10, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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  1. Overall, this is practical and engaging presentation. Well done.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. The structure is good. The flow is clear and logical. The practical feel of the presentation was a major strength. Providing an overview of the presentation at the start would be beneficial. Referring to more specific research would also contribute to the academic quality of the presentation.


  1. Communication is generally good. The voice-over was slightly fast in sections, but managed to engage the listener. Well done for including some illustrative examples. Slides are nicely presented, with a good amount of information on each.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Quality of audio and visuals is good. The presentation lacks an overly professional feel, largely as a result of the casual voice-over.

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  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter, with a clear and practical focus, excellent material on theory, reasonable although not indepth coverage of research, and reasonable written expression and use of Wiki learning features. Additional proofreading would be helpful - see more specific comments below and my copyedits.


  1. The strongest aspect of this chapter is its coverage of theory and particularly the integration of SDT throughout.
  2. There was perhaps overly heavily reliance on Ryan and Deci (2007).
  3. It could have been useful to include a figure showing the I-E motivation continuum suggested by Ryan and Deci.


  1. Research studies are cited, but more detail could be provided about key studies.
  2. Where the most relevant studies identified? (e.g., no meta-analyses?)
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Written expression is generally very good, easy to follow and understand.
    2. Examples are excellent.
    3. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, including clear take-home messages
    4. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
  2. Learning features
    1. Add a link to the multimedia presentation.
    2. Adding interwiki links would make the text more interactive.
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Sometimes singular and plural have been used in the same sentence e.g., "an individual" should be used in conjunction with s/he or his/her, not their
    2. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
  4. APA style
    1. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order (e.g., (Pauline, 2013, Anderson & Moss, 2011) -> (Anderson & Moss, 2011; Pauline, 2013)
    2. When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. (rather than et al) e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and then in the next paragraph cite Smith et al. (2001).
    3. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets e.g., (Ryan and Deci, 2007) -> (Ryan & Deci, 2007).
    4. Direct quotes need page numbers (e.g., “propensity to actively develop skills, engage in challenges and take interest in new activities without external prompts or rewards”.
    5. For the reference list, check that page numbers are provided for book chapters (e.g. Ryan and Deci (2007))

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:20, 12 November 2014 (UTC)