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The structure is good. The flow is clear and logical. The practical feel of the presentation was a major strength. Providing an overview of the presentation at the start would be beneficial. Referring to more specific research would also contribute to the academic quality of the presentation.
Communication is generally good. The voice-over was slightly fast in sections, but managed to engage the listener. Well done for including some illustrative examples. Slides are nicely presented, with a good amount of information on each.
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Overall, this is a solid chapter, with a clear and practical focus, excellent material on theory, reasonable although not indepth coverage of research, and reasonable written expression and use of Wiki learning features. Additional proofreading would be helpful - see more specific comments below and my copyedits.
Written expression is generally very good, easy to follow and understand.
Examples are excellent.
The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, including clear take-home messages
Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
Learning features
Add a link to the multimedia presentation.
Adding interwiki links would make the text more interactive.
Spelling, grammar and proofreading
Sometimes singular and plural have been used in the same sentence e.g., "an individual" should be used in conjunction with s/he or his/her, not their
The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
APA style
In-text citations should be in alphabetical order (e.g., (Pauline, 2013, Anderson & Moss, 2011) -> (Anderson & Moss, 2011; Pauline, 2013)
When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. (rather than et al) e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and then in the next paragraph cite Smith et al. (2001).
Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets e.g., (Ryan and Deci, 2007) -> (Ryan & Deci, 2007).
Direct quotes need page numbers (e.g., “propensity to actively develop skills, engage in challenges and take interest in new activities without external prompts or rewards”.
For the reference list, check that page numbers are provided for book chapters (e.g. Ryan and Deci (2007))
