Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Exercise and mood

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Hi, I have added a link to your chapter from mine (depression in athletes - see here) as i think the two go well together. Nice start to the chapter, the layout is very easy to read. I like that you have included biological explanations for a more scientific explanation of the subject, I enjoy learning (and learn better) from this perspective (as a lay person) and i'm sure more will agree with me! 1Kristina1 (discusscontribs)

Hi! This chapter looks great and one of which I'm interested in. The chapter looks good but I think maybe include an introduction on your 'psychological explanations' before jumping into the research like you did in biological explanations. I found an article that talks about the benefits of exercise on mood in older adults. http://zh9bf5sp6t.scholar.serialssolutions.com/?sid=google&auinit=S&aulast=Arent&atitle=The+Effects+of+Exercise+on+Mood+in+Older+Adults:+A+Meta-Analytic&title=Journal+of+aging+and+physical+activity&volume=8&date=2000&spage=407&issn=1063-8652 Good luck with your book chapter! --U3054867 (discusscontribs) 03:40, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

Hey, I really like what you've done so far, it seems to be a really interesting topic. I'm looking forward to reading more information as you add it.A minor issue was that your references weren't formatted with a hanging indent so I fixed that up for you. --U3080853 (discusscontribs) 22:45, 20 October 2014 (UTC)u3080853


Hi, I have just read through your chapter, this topic is such an interesting one, you have done a really good job so far, i like how you have included exercise and depression and anxiety, they go really well, and you have really good detail and layout so far! i know your most likely not finished yet, so maybe a possible suggestion could be some pictures or a diagram explaining the biological aspects in simpler terms i know visuals may help some people understand a little easier , only if you wish :) , but overall good start cannot wait to read the completed chapter :). --U3080857 (discusscontribs) 10:34, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Hi- looking great so far! I've added a few sentences to your page underneath the impact of exercise on mood from the Berger&Motl reference. Hopefully thats helpful- looking forward to seeing the end product! --U3068695 (discusscontribs) 01:51, 22 October 2014 (UTC)


Hey added a part to your self-efficacy hypothesis part (People who are considered healthy are able to successfully regulate their feelings, moods, thoughts as well as goals (Bandura, 1997). A person with low self-efficacy may be more prone to feel anxious during situations where they feel they cannot achieve the desired goal (Craft, 2005). Low self-efficacy can also play a role in increasing negative thoughts and evaluations in depressed people (Craft, 2005).) --U3080853 (discusscontribs) 02:27, 22 October 2014 (UTC)


Thanks for your contribution re: recommending a journal. ThanksI do have that journal to use but have not done so as yet. I am glad someone has recommended this journal as it proves on the right path. Thanks -- U110130 (discusscontribs) 08:38, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

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Congratulations on the great topic so far. This is of particular interest to most people I'd assume because of the topic which makes it very relateable. For this reason, perhaps you do not need to incorporate more case studies? Although I would recommend you do this just to highlight the points you are making. I believe you have covered the topic well and I am glad you included both the physiological and psychological effects. There is definately room for case studies under these headings to take your work to the next level. I also feel that there may be room for a topic of motivation specifically, however, so far you have significantly covered the content. JacquelineSpence (discusscontribs) 04:21, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

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Added links[edit]

Hi! Your chapter looks great- I have added some links under 'See Also' for chapters from previous years that are related to yours! Hope that alright. --U3068695 (discusscontribs) 03:22, 25 October 2014 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

Overall, this is a well developed presentation. Well done!

Structure and content[edit]

The structure is clear and the flow is logical. Theory and research are well integrated. It may have been useful to clarify at the beginning of the chapter that the presentation is focusing on exercise in relation to mood disorders specifically. Illustrative examples are used appropriately. The conclusions are clear and concise.

Communication[edit]

Communication is well done. The slides are good, with a nice amount of information on each. The inclusion of more images could have been an area for improvement. The voice-over is well paced, with engaging expression.

Production quality[edit]

Basic production tools are used effectively. The audio quality is generally good, although perhaps slightly too quiet. There is some background noise. Quality of visuals are good. A link back to the book chapter is provided.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this chapter provides a solid, wide-ranging examination of theory, reasonable coverage of relevant research, and could be improved by using shorter paragraphs and closer proofreading for grammatical errors. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below.

Theory[edit]

  1. A wide range of relevant theories are considered.
  2. Aerobic exercise could be better explained, along with the theoretical mechanisms which may impact on mood.
  3. Two case studies are well used to illustrate key theoretical points. Perhaps the explanation of theories could be abbreviated to allow for more case studies.

Research[edit]

  1. Citations are used effectively.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. A critical approach to research is evident which is generally desirable, although sometimes this detracts from the goal of summarising what is known and making practical suggestions for how to improve one's life. I suspect the research literature on this topic is more conclusive than is implied, for example, in the conclusion.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    2. Some sentences could be rewritten to improve the clarity of written expression (e.g., "explanations to explain")
    3. In the Conclusion, what are the take-home messages?
    4. The quality of written expression could be improved where clarification templates have been added to the page.
  2. Learning features
    1. Some Tables and/or Figures were used effectively; more could be used
    2. Some interwiki links were added; more could be used
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
    2. Proofreading needed (e.g., (Ross &Thomas, 2010) -> (Ross & Thomas, 2010))
  4. APA style
    1. Check/correct APA style captions for tables (e.g., capitalisation)
    2. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:37, 28 November 2014 (UTC)