Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Emotion paradox

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APA style captions for images and tables[edit source]

I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:30, 23 October 2014 (UTC)[]

Feedback[edit source]

Hi! Really interesting topic you have chosen, but like you said- complex and technical! I think you've done really well so far. I would recommend expanding on some of the concepts- particularly info around core affect and conceptual knowledge. Possibly providing a practical example here? I think also integrating the practical applications into the content would be helpful- that way it may be easier to understand the theory and research and its applicability. I've also gone through and formatted some of the links you had in there- hopefully this is helpful! Good luck with the rest of your chapter.--U3068695 (discusscontribs) 01:54, 25 October 2014 (UTC)[]

Hi Claire

Your page is looking really good. I love that you've introduced it with a realistic example - it's very catching!

I've just got a couple of suggestions:

One of the first things I noticed is that the pictures are all down the right side. I was wondering if it would look better if some were on the left. For example, if you moved Figure 2 to the left it would balance the other pictures, but also change the layout of your words so they didn't appear to be in a block. I'd also be tempted to move figure 5 over also for the same reasons.

If you have the space for extra words you could put a box in and elaborate on what 'emotion' means (though your page isn't lacking for not having it from what I can see)

In the paragraph starting 'Barrett (2006b) suggests that behavioural responses' you have 2 sentences starting with 'Barrett suggests..'. It may read better if you change the second to 'It has been proposed...' and just cite Barrett.

I'd consider putting in links to a couple of techinical things like facial electromyography and Facial emotional granularity (there's a wikipedia link to both, I checked for you)

Other than that, it reads beautifully - it's informative and interesting. You've done a great job!

Chelsi CFD (discusscontribs) 23:43, 25 October 2014 (UTC)[]

Thanks so much for all the feedback - I think I have incorporated it all, some really helpful suggestions Cdrake2014 (discusscontribs) 14:24, 26 October 2014 (UTC)[]

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, a fantastic presentation, well done.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. This presentation had great inclusion of theory and explained concepts in a clear and concise manner. For improvement, it would have been great to see some discussion of any specific studies to enhance research component

Communication[edit source]

  1. Overall, the pace was good and the presentation was engaging, good work. A real life example was used to good effect. For improvement, an overview and conclusion to summarise key points would aid a watcher

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Production quality was excellent and all relevant links, licensing and referencing information was included, well done. Courtney.Bruce (discusscontribs) 03:42, 23 November 2014 (UTC)[]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an outstanding chapter in all respects. For more feedback, see my (minor) copyedits and comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. The chapter provides a fantastic explanation and review of the emotion paradox, the conceptual act of emotion theory, with useful comparisons with related theoretical models.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is well covered, with interesting descriptions of relevant studies.
  2. The chapter makes effective use of in-text citations.
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. The chapter is very written expression and makes effective use of the wiki environment interactivity and learning features.
  2. The chapter benefits from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s).
  3. Layout
    1. I reduced the use of coloured box backgrounds to aid with simplicity and readability.
  4. Learning features
    1. The text could become more interactive by including interwiki links.
  5. Spelling, grammar and proofreading is excellent.
  6. APA style is excellent.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:17, 24 November 2014 (UTC)[]