Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Dreams and emotion

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Coloured boxes[edit]

I recommend keeping coloured boxes to a minimum - e.g., follow the style on Wikipedia. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:01, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:24, 8 December 2014 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this was an interesting, expressive presentation; well done.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Perhaps an initial explanation of the presentation's structure would be helpful to the reader who isn't sure what will be covered. The content provides a very good overall coverage of the psychology of dreams, but it could be improved by focusing more directly on the emotional content of dreams. Relatively little research is covered. What is the answer to the original question? (i.e., the take-home message about the problem from psychological theory and research? - take home messages were provided, but they related more to dream interpretation). Some examples of dreams could be useful.

Communication[edit]

  1. I loved listening to your voice - great intonation and expression; sounded very natural, like being part of an interesting conversation (you would make a great story reader). A bit more pause in the audio between the slides would help to let the key points sink in. The text on slides was way too small (and there was too much of it) - aim for less text with larger font.

Production quality[edit]

  1. The overall production quality was very good. The audio was very clear. Image attributions underneath each image were excellent. No copyright license was indicated. No link to the book chapter was provided. There was a link from the book chapter to the presentation.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:55, 7 November 2014 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonable, basic chapter about dreams and emotion. It could be improved by providing less general content about dreaming and focusing more of the theory, research and examples on the emotional content/role of dreams.
  2. For more feedback, see these copyedits and comments below.

Theory[edit]

  1. Theory is covered in a fairly general way.
  2. A more indepth focus on theory relating to the role of emotion in dreaming is desirable.

Research[edit]

  1. Basic coverage of relevant research is provided; more indepth coverage would be ideal
  2. Did you consult Freud (1913) and Putnam (1914)? If not, don't cite them.
  3. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression is basic but sufficient.
    1. There is no mention of relevant theory, research or focus questions in the Overview or Conclusion.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Coloured boxes were removed to aid readability; keep the style simple (e.g., as per Wikipedia articles)
    2. Basic use is made of Tables and/or Figures.
    3. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Learning features
    1. The text could become more interactive by including interwiki links.
    2. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar of some sentences needs improvement (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
  5. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    2. Add APA style captions to tables and figures.
    3. Remove issue numbers for seriated journal references.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:24, 8 December 2014 (UTC)