Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Dopamine and motivation

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:41, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

Hi, I have also been looking at dopamine's effect on emotion for my book chapter. I am not sure how helpful these may be for you, but I found this article that mention positive reinforcement (in this context, how dopamine motivates chocolate consumption). http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S016503270600084X You will need to log into uc library or whatever for full access. Hope you might find this helpful.. My chapter on chocolate and mood might have a few more references in my text about dopamine that may mention something about dopamine's role in motivation, but not off of the top of my head. All the best for your chapter U3083503 (discusscontribs) 09:16, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

Feedback[edit]

Hi, Just had a read through your chapter, well done on describing dopamine at the start.. it can be tricky getting your head around the structure. Just 2 notes, at the start you have linked dopamine twice, but one would be enough and give the start a bit more flow. Also, have you considered giving a really simple case study to show how dopamine helps with wellbeing or something like that and directly link the self help aspect of the chapter question. just a though :) --Dsalvestro (discusscontribs) 07:36, 26 October 2014 (UTC)


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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, a great effort on an entertaining presentation!

Structure and content[edit]

  1. This presentation had good inclusion of theory and showed solid understanding. It would have been great to see some discussion of research studies to enhance and integrate with the theory discussion

Communication[edit]

  1. The presentation had a good pace and made effective use of an entertaining presentation mode. For improvement, differentiation in voice tone would enhance 

Production quality[edit]

  1. the quality was solid all around, just remember to include referencing and licensing information, thus this presentation likely violates copyright law.

Courtney.Bruce (discusscontribs) 04:01, 23 November 2014 (UTC)


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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a promising chapter, with strong treatment of theory, moderate coverage of research, and problematic written expression. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below.

Theory[edit]

  1. The material on I-E motivation isn't needed because it is not clearly related to dopamine.
  2. Dopamine and motivation theory is quite well covered; it is perhaps overly complex at times and could benefit from being simplified and summarised.

Research[edit]

  1. Research is moderately well covered.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression was problematic, with numerous grammar issues leading to sentences that need rewriting - see [grammar?] and [Rewrite to improve clarity] tags.
    1. Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    2. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
  2. Learning features
    1. Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links
    2. The quiz could be expanded.
    3. Some useful images were included.
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., Dopamines -> Dopamine's
    2. Use Australian spelling e.g., sensitization -> sensitisation
    3. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
  4. APA style
    1. Figure X. should be italics
    2. Did you consult Skinner (1953) and Hull (1943)? If not, don't cite it.
    3. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    4. Apply italics to the source name in the reference list.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:28, 24 November 2014 (UTC)