Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Cyber-bullying motivation

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Hey! I was looking up some info for another assignment and came across this info from Queensland Government about cyberbullying - thought it might be worth a read for you? U122096 (discusscontribs) 07:29, 19 October 2014 (UTC)

Hi! I was looking up some information and came across this journal article which might be beneficial for your topic: Are cyber-bullies really bullied? an investigation of reactive and proactive online aggression Might be a good counter-argument if you need one.

I came across this youtube video. Its a dance piece about cyberbullying - perhaps it could be included in your external resources section? It's a good visual aid for educating about cyberbullying :) U122096 (discusscontribs) 05:12, 25 October 2014 (UTC)

Anonymity articles[edit]

Firstly, I like how you have defined bullying in the general, overall term and concept, and then followed that with a definition of what cyber-bullying is. Furthermore, I like how you have distinguished and explained the difference between the two, particularly your pointing out that the factors that make-up generic bullying are not necessarily factors of cyber-bullying. Good work!

I also came across some articles related to anonymity and cyber-bullying that may be of some assistance to you: U3084341 (discusscontribs) 00:51, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

APA style captions for images and tables[edit]

I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:08, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Excellent overview[edit]

I love the overview - the examples work well as does the paragraph that follows; well done Smiley.svg -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:42, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

additional things to include[edit]

I thought it might be interesting if you gave a definition of internet trolls and how they are cyber-bullies as well. You could write about how trolls set up hate groups online and they target people they usually don't know and why they would do this? --Hynes08 (discusscontribs) 00:43, 24 October 2014 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall, this is a well developed presentation. Well done.

Structure and content[edit]

Theories are well integrated and articulated. Research could have been more of a focus. The introduction section is a strength, and really engages the viewer. The 'Strategies to address cyber-bullying' slide helps to make the presentation practical and broadly relevant. A clearer conclusion would be a useful inclusion.


Communication is generally good. The voice-over uses good expression, but is slightly too fast. The slides are well developed; effectively presenting the important information. Figures and images are used nicely throughout. Some text is too small (particularly in figures).

Production quality[edit]

The audio is 'fuzzy', with quite a low volume. The visual quality is good. There appears to be some lag in moving between slides. A link to the book chapter is provided. No copyright licence information is provided.

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Chapter review and feedback

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below.


  1. The key constructs are well explained and illustrated.
  2. Relevant theoretical perspectives are well explained and integrated.


  1. Several relevant studies are effectively integrated, and a critical approach is evident.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. A small number of statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit]

  1. In general, the chapter is well-written expression, with minor areas for improvement.
    1. The chapter Overview provided some excellent examples.
    2. Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s).
  2. Learning features
    1. The text could become more interactive by including interwiki links.
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., victims vs. victim's vs. victims'
    2. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
  4. Layout
    1. Some figures were used; these could be labelled more effectively and more could be used to help illustrate key points.
  5. APA style was generally very good
    1. For the first citation of a source with three or more authors, include a comma before the "and" or "&"
    2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    3. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:18, 26 November 2014 (UTC)