Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Cults and motivation

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Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:05, 23 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Food for thought[edit source]

Hello, can I just say yours so far was one of the most interesting I have read! Very insightful, I find cults fascinating, always a classic when there is a story on 60 minutes regarding them. Just some quick food for thought, with all the current drama in the middle east at the moment, what do you think the classification of radical group ISIS is? We are seeing kids from all around the world being convinced to leave home and join their cause, do you think this could maybe be regarded as cult? I am not sure what defines a cult but just thought with the current affairs it could be something to look at! Keep it up look forward to reading the finished product :) --U3083978 (discusscontribs) 10:06, 26 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Hey, thanks for the comment :) I've included a subheading called 'cults and terrorism' and that's where I will address groups such as ISIS, from my reading I am under the impression that don't like to be referred to as 'cults' but if the shoe fits... Thanks for the feed back!

Brief Comments[edit source]

Hey there, I have always wondered what the motivation is for an individual to join cults, so I'm glad that this topic is being covered! So far a very interesting concept of what you have posted, and I look forward to read the rest when its finished. I would suggest if you could find some personal stories or comments r from individuals who have joined cults & their personal reasoning could be really interesting? As well as providing cultural views on cults? Keep up the good work. --U3069714 (discusscontribs) 07:44, 26 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Fantastic work uploaded so far. You have a very clear academic style of writing, publishable! I find the subject of cults fascinating and have done a lot of my own research on the topic. One idea for external multimedia is to link readers to high quality documentaries available online. For example, I learned a lot from watching this one on the Jonestown massacres: Maybe in the 'See also' section you could have a little list of good docos. Try under the Crime or Psychology section if you are having trouble finding good ones. Can't wait to read the rest of your article! --U3090859 (discusscontribs) 07:57, 26 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Hey! This is so so so interesting! Can't wait to see it all finished :) maybe add in a few more interactive things to break it all up a bit. Photos, images, graphs, etc. Even in side text boxes, Moodle has heaps of posts on coding for images and tables and everything if you get stuck :) I've found that to be really helpful for me. Good luck with the rest! -- (discuss) 10:20, 26 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Just a few comments[edit source]

So I find this super interesting! I'm really interested in these topics, I think it's great that you're adding parts about individuals who have escaped cults. In regards to heavens gate, it's also pretty interesting that certain people are still alive from the cult, this article somewhat talks about the cult too it's less about the cult aspect and more about how it appears in todays culture.

Also, I'm doing my chapter about serial killers motivation. So we could potentially link our articles

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent multimedia presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The structure was clear and interesting, highlighting key features. There was a conscious effort to consider theory. However, there was relatively little emphasis on research. The one main area for improvement here could be to focus less on general info about cults and more what psychological science contributes in the way of theory and research to understand why some people join and stay with cults.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Communication was clear. The slide presentation layout and format was particularly well constructed, with lots of appropriate images, well selected text, and the animated newspaper layout helped to make the presentation visually engaging. The audio was clear and well-paced. Perhaps more intonation in places could help to make it more engaging.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall production quality was very good, with some areas for improvement. The presentation is appropriately titled (although no mention of motivation) and easy to find on youtube. There were several spelling errors in the slides e.g., Psycotherapy, Mawlow, potenital. No interactive (i.e., clickable) hyperlink is provided back to the book chapter was provided. A Creative Commons license is shown on the first slide (good) but this doesn't match the selection of a Standard Youtube license in the video's meta-data. No attributions for the images are provided, so there could be some copyright violation involved.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:04, 7 November 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

Overall, this chapter provides a reasonably good insight into what motivates people to join cults. Theory is well-covered. Research is limited. Written expression is good, with some limitations - see comments below and these copyedits: [1]

Theory[edit source]

  1. The opening sentence implies that cults are associated with religions - is this always the case? (I'm not so sure - depends how religion is defined, I guess.)
  2. Good coverage of relevant theory is covered, including social belonging, self actualisation, self-esteem, and persuasive leadership

Research[edit source]

  1. The research component is the weakest area of the chapter, with little evidence described.
  2. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. The chapter could have benefited from a more developed Overview, with a clearer focus on the topic (not just defining cults, but understanding what motivates people to join cults).
    2. Use APA style Table and Figure captions
    3. Figure 1 should be larger (text can't be read)
    4. Captions should be added to images, otherwise the relevance of the images/figures is not evident to readers.
    5. Some statements needed closer citation e.g., "Another trait that the majority of cult leaders share is narcissism[factual?]".
    6. Check APA style for quotes longer than 40 words (e.g., quote defining terrorism). Direct quotes also need page numbers.
    7. Getting earlier comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
  2. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links?
    2. The quiz did not include any questions about the motivation contributing to people's participation in cults (which is the main focus of the chapter).
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Use Australian spelling e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise
    2. Did you consult Maslow (1943) as a primary reference? If not, then this shouldn't be cited.
    3. Some grammar problems are evident - e.g., see [grammar?] tags.
  4. APA style
    1. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order
    2. Numbers under 10 should be written in words e.g. five
    3. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    4. The references are partly in APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:14, 11 November 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]