Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Comfort eating and negative emotions

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Hello, I realise it is quite close to the due date, but I am going to suggest some things for your topic as you may not have caught up to writing it all out yet. I researched quite a bit on why people eat chocolate when they are depressed, and found that having low serotonin causes a craving for carbohydrates (there's plenty in chocolate!). This is called the serotonergic hypothesis. They talk a bit about it in a paper at this link... http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S016503270600084X It has been cited quite a few times and an interesting read. All the best and hope this finds you well :) U3083503 (discusscontribs) 12:54, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there! What a great paper - it addresses a question that many people ask. I made a couple of small grammatical changes (for example, I changed it's to its) but just wanted to let you know I found it really interesting. --U3090859 (discusscontribs) 07:00, 25 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]


You have done a great job in defining what comfort eating, I was a little unsure if there was a definition , and there is. You have done really well with differentiating emotional hunger and physical hunger. Your layout is really great, very easy to read the sections of information, and I like how you have broken it up in the sections you have, this has made it really easy to absorb the information. A suggestion for the headings you use Gross' Model of Emotional Regulation you only need a capital letter at the start, so it should be Gross model of emotional regulation. I checked your other headings and you have only done this once, so you can change it quickly  . overall I really like how you have approached the chapter well done.--U3080857 (discusscontribs) 01:54, 26 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Such a fascinating topic! I like the way the information is divided and formatted, it makes it very easy to read. I made a few grammar/spelling edits but nothing major. I noticed a few references weren't filled in yet, under Eating and Emotion. The take home message section is a good sum up of everything in the chapter. It's looking really good! U3068280 (discusscontribs) 02:11, 26 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback[edit source]

Hey!

Looking good so far! I really like what you have done with the structure. The colored boxes really add some structure to the chapter and it makes it easier to follow. I just have one small suggestion. In order to make it a little nicer to read, or to link it all together, consider adding more images. It will make it more readable; lets be real, most of us get scared from blocks of words!

Also, in one of your tables, maybe make the first column in bold writing to separate it from column 2. Just makes it a little nicer and easier to distinguish. (Mechanism vs Strategy columns you have in your theoretical framework section)

And lastly, consider linking with other book chapters within your texts. Saves us from scrolling down to internal links and losing the spot we were reading! :)


Other than that, great job. The context seems to really incorporate the question.

Good luck finalizing it all. Cheers

--CazaF (discusscontribs) 04:33, 26 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]


Hey, I have just read your book chapter and and it raises some really good/interesting points. I enjoyed how you defined emotional hunger in contrast to physical hunger and I will say I can defiantly relate :). Your overall book chapter layout and presentation is also visually appealing and stimulating so good job and goodluck! --Bella_wilson (discusscontribs) 4:38, 27 October 2014


Hiya, Good read, i feel the overview is a bit indepth, looks like an introduction but seems to go from an indepth start, then back to very basic definitions. Suggest a shorter intro that is still indepth but doesn't lose the reader. If not still a good read just an opinion :) Good luck --u3068311 (discusscontribs)

Hey, Good Work! reading through the chapter made looking at comfort eating much easier to read and distinguish itself from physical hunger. the layout was visually appealing and i enjoyed the small amount of scientific terms and descriptions, which makes this chapter easy to read and understand, whilst keeping the reader engaged! Great work and Good luck!

--irwin13 (discusscontribs) 08:12, 27 October 2014

Heading casing[edit source]

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:18, 26 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a great presentation – well done.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. A well designed and organised presentation. The presentation provides good overall coverage of the relationship between comfort eating and negative emotions with more than adequate research linkage. There is adequate coverage of related theory/theoretical frameworks. The content itself is somewhat dry (academic) and could be made more interesting e.g., by using a case study or additional illustrative examples. An initial overview slide or explanation of the presentation's structure would be helpful to the viewer who isn't sure what will be covered. Simplification or breaking down of the verbally delivered content into key points would also have improved the presentation as at the moment it is quite a lot to absorb. Still, logical flow between concepts is demonstrated and a summary of the presentation and take home message is provided.

Communication[edit source]

  1. An engaging presentation style which displays communication of ideas using voice and image. There is good use of diagrams; however, the presentation could be improved by using more imagery and colour. Good use of background music and tone/pitch of voice to match. The delivery could be improved however, by slowing the pace at which the oral content is delivered to prevent it from sounding rushed and allowing the viewer to fully absorb what you are saying before you move on to the next point. Prezi provides an enjoyable and interactive slideshow.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The presentation had good picture and audio quality and demonstrated effective use of a basic production tool (prezi) to communicate ideas. The presentation could benefit from some rehearsal to eliminate any mistakes made and to add an element of professionalism. A reference list was provided however the presentation was 32 seconds over the allotted time limit – cutting off the end of the tying it all together slide and reference list. A link to and from the book chapter was provided. A standard youtube license was also provided.

RenaeLN (discusscontribs) 07:06, 21 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this was a promising chapter in terms of scope and structure, but the quality of written expression is borderline/poor.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Reasonably good coverage of relevant theory is provided.
  2. Some statements were not sufficiently supported by peer reviewed citations - e.g., see [factual?] tags

Research[edit source]

  1. Coverage of research is OK.
  2. "Can have a correlation" - what sort of correlation? Positive or negative? Strong or weak?
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression was often overly complicated/awkward.
    1. Several sentences were grammatically incorrect and/or could be improved by rewriting - e.g., see the [Rewrite to improve clarity] tags
  2. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links were well used. Only create an interwiki link on first mention of a keyword (e.g., see Wikipedia articles). Subsequent interwiki links for that word or phrase should be removed.
    2. A quiz is provided.
    3. Some images and tables are used.
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
    2. Some words/phrases appeared to be missing - see the [missing something?] tags
    3. Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., Comparison's -> Comparisons
    4. Use Australian spelling e.g., summarize -> summarise
  4. APA style
    1. Check APA style for in-text citations e.g., use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    2. Check APA style for Table captions
    3. Check APA style for citations e.g., date of access is no longer needed, issue numbers not needed etc.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:09, 21 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]