Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Child emotional abuse

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Hey there,

I read through your article and I noticed you haven't really incorporated how the law may handle emotional abuse, especially in children. It might be a little off topic but it would be interesting to see how emotional abuse is managed from a legal sense and how that effects the mental health of the victim. Emotional abuse is very hard to prove so I wonder if a person who suffered from emotional abuse, may experience other mental health problems associated with attempting to resolve the legal aspects of emotional abuse. Otherwise well done, this was an interesting read.

--Bectionary (discusscontribs) 5:57, 27 October 2014 (UTC)

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Hey, Noticed you don't have any information on how to deal with emotional abuse, I found this article that looks at a conceptual framework for dealing with emotional abuse. Its on google scholar and UC has access to it, its called How to deal with emotional abuse and neglect—Further development of a conceptual framework (FRAMEA) by Danya Glaser. Hope this helps and gives you a good starting place


Good luck with the rest of your book chapter, it looks good so far :) --U3084587 (discusscontribs) 01:26, 23 October 2014 (UTC)u3084587Reply[reply]

Comments[edit source]

What a great chapter. From looking at the previous comments it seems as though you have been taking aboard any recommendations and doing what you can to improve your chapter which is great. My only recommendation is that perhaps you make the long term/short term impacts a bit more noticeable through categorising the effects in either one of these categories. Otherwise, I think you've done really well. You are one of the first people i've seen who have explicitly defined the problem which is great to see! Also, just be careful with how much colour you use - this can get a little confusing at times. Goodluck! JacquelineSpence (discusscontribs) 011:21, 24 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Heading formatting[edit source]

I recommend using default formatting for titles and headings. This helps make the content visually accessibility for those with visual impairments and helps to display the content on different types of devices. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:04, 23 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

APA style captions for images and tables[edit source]

I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:30, 23 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Reference List[edit source]

Hi, just following the APA formatting style, the reference list should be indented to be hanging, so I've just fixed that up for you :) --Can Rogerthat (discusscontribs) 23:29, 23 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

References[edit source]


Thanks for your feedback. Your page is looking really good with lots of photos and it is easy to read. I just made a few minor grammatical changes to some of your references. They should be right now. Soneill90 (discusscontribs) 00:39, 25 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Sentence structure[edit source]

Hi again,

Just letting you know i made another minor edit on one of your sentences so that it makes more sense now. Other than that your book chapter is looking really good! Good work :)Soneill90 (discusscontribs) 02:51, 26 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, a good broad overview of emotional abuse in children, well done. Prezi was used to good effect. See additional comments below.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. This presentation had a good overview of what emotional abuse is and the effects it may have on children.
  2. Theory was covered as well as how to approach the issue – it would be great to see some expansion on the research section, as well as improved flow - at times it felt slightly rushed
  3. There was little coverage of research.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation was well-paced.
  2. Prezi was used to create an engaging presentation to look at. # Perhaps use a case study or other illustrative example to improve
  3. Some of the slides in the presentation would be easier to view if the font size was larger (and less text was shown).

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overview and Conclusion slides would be helpful.
  2. Prezi allowed for clear communication and following of ideas.
  3. There was white noise feedback in the background throughout – better sound quality (by using a headset microphone) would improve.
  4. Remember to include licensing information for the presentation.

Courtney.Bruce (discusscontribs) 03:54, 23 November 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. This chapter provides a reasonable review of the consequences of childhood emotional abuse and some intervention approaches, but could benefit from further drafting. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. The strongest aspect of the chapter was its coverage of theories, particularly in relation to intervention.
  2. The chapter title did not match the title assigned in the book's table of contents.
  3. No definition of emotional abuse is provided in an Overview section; definitions can be found later on.

Research[edit source]

  1. Several research studies are cited, but key studies could be explained in more detail.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression could be improved in several respects in order to bring it to a more professional standard.
    1. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
    2. Avoid directional referencing e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned
    3. The quality of written expression could be improved, for example, where clarification templates have been added to the page.
    4. The chapter could have benefited from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
  2. Layout
    1. The main heading layout has been simplified/standardised
    2. The other headings also should have additional formatting removed and level 2 headings should be used as the main section headings.
    3. Some Tables and/or Figures were used effectively.
  3. Learning features
    1. Remove/correct links to Wikipedia articles that don't exist e.g., spurring.
    2. A useful quiz is included.
  4. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - e.g., see the [grammar?] tags
    2. Check appropriate use of commas e.g., "According to Hornor (2012) these children are the victims of emotional abuse." -> "According to Hornor (2012), these children are the victims of emotional abuse."
    3. Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., resilience’s vs. resiliences
    4. Use abbreviations such as "e.g." inside brackets and "for example" outside brackets
  5. APA style
    1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    2. The reference list uses basic APA style, but no formatting has been applied.
    3. Remove issue numbers for seriated journal references.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:43, 26 November 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]