Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Attributions and motivation

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Hi Jade, I loved your chapter, paragraphs flow very smoothly and it is very easy to read and to understand. I just have a question. Do personality traits influence whether we attribute things to external or internal factors or not? :) --U3074414 (discusscontribs) 00:11, 25 October 2014 (UTC) Hi how are you going?Reply[reply]

I saw you chapter and here are a few comments:

1. with attribution theory, have you come across Kelley's Covariation Model? Kelley's model is quite influential in this area. 2. I don't know whether explanatory style is kind of attribution too? For pessimistic (more likely to be depressed) people, when they do well at something, they attribute it to luck, or other external things, rather their own ability. How would this affect someone's motivation? Will these people work harder or not so hard next time? I thought this will be interesting to cover in your chapter. --Xlc (discusscontribs) 23:44, 20 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]


I'm doing the Guilt and Motivation page, so I got a notification when you linked to it.

I like what you've done here, but I have a few comments.

First, when you lose a tennis match it's losing, not loosing.

Second, with all the colour on your page I thought I'd run it through an accessibility checker (I'll put something up on moodle with details), but that indicated that your colour schemes may be difficult for some users to differentiate the text from the background. (Web Content Accessibility Guidelines (WCAG))

Third, in your tables you have some cells that have leading capitals, and some that don't, it's not a big thing, but a consistent method is better.

Fourth, I think some of your in-text references have an extra comma i.e. (Graham, & Weiner, 1996) not (Graham & Weiner, 1996).

Last, I don't know if you've finished it or not, but I think your conclusion should wrap everything up, your conclusion should begin pulling back into more general information that restates the main points of your argument. (

Fitzcaelte (discusscontribs)

Hey Jade,

I think your page is coming along really nicely looks like you are almost there!!!

I did notice a few typos in your Expectancy-value theory section, not sure if this is finished yet,

but thought I would just draw your attention to them so you can sought them out, only in the

last paragraph, everything else is great, please feel free to disregard but have rephrased to flow more smoothly:

"the overlap of causal properties with the main determinants of motivation is relevant to attribution in this domain"

3rd sentence in paragraph "in attaining particular goals" and also "they will be more motivated to give their best attempt"

This may or may not help your flow, pls feel free to disregard if not helpful, other that those minor things it all sounds great and meshes nicely

Cheers Prue

Josephineanne (discusscontribs)

Hey Jade,

Me again, just fixed a few typos in your Weiners Theory section, sorry just realised I didn't give a description in the edit

summary though, sorry about that, pretty sure they are ok though, have triple checked, but maybe just read over to check, just a spelling mistake

in "questionnaire" and a few grammatical tweaks!!


Josephineanne (discusscontribs)

APA style captions for images and tables[edit source]

I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:04, 23 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Title layout[edit source]

I recommend using a simpler, plainer, more standard layout for the title. See here for an example: Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Academic cheating motivation. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:25, 24 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

comments[edit source]

Hey, I just finished reading your topic, it's really great and runs really smoothly.

I have one small suggestion, maybe instead of mainly using green background, potentially using it for just important points or highlighting specific areas.

I know this is super late. But it does look great! Good luck

--Charlotte.C (discusscontribs) 11:55, 26 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, a fantastic presentation that included theory and research with sound applications to everyday life, well done.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. This presentation had good integration of theory and research, and flowed nicely. The understanding and explanation of theory is excellent, and the content was well cited. The research component could be improved by explaining a few key research studies and/or major research review.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation was very engaging and made effective use of illustrative examples.
  2. Use of Powtoon helped to create fun and clear communication of the ideas in the chapter.
  3. The presentation could be improved by a slightly slower speaking pace
  4. The presentation was well-summarised.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. A clear and high quality presentation, well done.
  2. As noted above, a slightly slower speaking pace would make the quality even higher.

Courtney.Bruce (discusscontribs) 03:55, 23 November 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It takes a complex topic and makes it accessible, interesting, and practical. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is very well covered and explained, with practical examples.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is reasonably well covered within the allowable length.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression was generally professional.
    1. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s).
    2. Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the [explain?] tags
    3. Avoid directional referencing e.g., "As previously mentioned"
  2. Learning features
    1. Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links
    2. Tables and/or Figures were used effectively.
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., participants vs participants' vs participant's
    2. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
    3. Boxes with backgrounds were removed (not needed/standard)
  4. APA style
    1. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order - needs checking/correcting in at least one place
    2. Remove issue numbers for seriated journal references.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:34, 26 November 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]