Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Agreeableness and emotion

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Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:25, 26 October 2014 (UTC)


Great read[edit]

hey , that was a really interesting read. I would have thought that topic would have been hard to gather information on, but you found heaps and smashed it! Only thing i noticed - in your reference section it might need some work to be apa format, mainly by putting the journal articles into italics. Good luck with it all :) --U3083978 (discusscontribs) 20:42, 26 October 2014 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

Overall, this is a neatly presented piece of work.

Structure and content[edit]

The structure is clear. A clear aim is articulated at the beginning of the presentation. Clear definitions provide a good foundation for the presentation. Research is incorporated throughout. Theory is not adequately addressed. For example, exploration of the theory behind the Big 5 personality factors could have been included. Illustrative examples could also be included.

Communication[edit]

Communication is generally good. The voice-over is well paced, with good expression. The slides are neatly presented. Try to use dot points to put forward the important points, rather than full sentences or paragraphs. Inclusion of images and/or figures would help to make the presentation more engaging.

Production quality[edit]

Basic production tools are used effectively. The use of Prezi gives a professional feel. The audio quality is good. There are some inconsistency between the volume between takes/slides. The visuals are clear. A link to the book chapter is not provided.

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Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a basic chapter which could be improved by providing a better explanation of agreeableness and improving the quality of written expression. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.

Theory[edit]

  1. A poor definition/description of agreeableness is provided. The chapter could be improved by describing agreeableness as a personality dimension and explaining its facets.
  2. The Overview offers a somewhat confusing definition of negative affect as the relative absence of happiness, rather than the presence of unpleasant emotions.
  3. A case study or example could be helpful.

Research[edit]

  1. Research is reasonably well covered and explained.
  2. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of the effects.
  3. Some claims are not supported by citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs.
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As mentioned above,")
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long.
  2. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links could be added to make the text more interactive.
    2. No images or tables were used.
  3. Layout
  4. Excessive use of coloured boxes/backgrounds was removed so as to aid accessibility/readability; strive for simple layout (e.g., as per Wikipedia)
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
  5. Grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar of some sentences needs to be improved for the written expression to be of professional standard (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
    2. The word "that" is missing from many sentences (e.g., "the significant role that agreeableness plays...")
  6. APA style
    1. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations.
    2. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:58, 3 December 2014 (UTC)