Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Aggression in adolescents

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Hi there! As i was researching articles for my book chapter i came across this article which might be helpful to you! It explains a lot of the effects of aggression on the brain. Goodluck :)

The corpus callosum: A commissural road to anger and aggression

U3081566 (discuss • contribs) 21:49, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

hey

hey, i have been working on sensation seeking and alcohol use. i will strongly suggest to have a look at the relationship between sensation seeking and aggression in adolescent. there are a lot of articles that talk about the relationship of the two. please come to my page, you may find some interesting articles. hey, i will also suggest to have a look at:

Konijn, E. A., Nije Bijvank, M., & Bushman, B. J. (2007). I wish I were a warrior: The role of wishful identification in the effects of violent video games on aggression in adolescent boys. Developmental Psychology, 43(4), 1038-1044. doi:10.1037/0012-1649.43.4.1038

Zuckerman, M. (1994). Behavioural Expressions and Biosocial Bases of Sensation Seeking. New York, U.S.A.: Cambridge University Press.

Mg 9898 (discuss • contribs) 07:22, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

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