Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Ageing and emotion

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Hey! Your topic seems quite interesting, and I was wondering what approach to ageing you were going to take? Biological ageing such as bodily changes and chronological age? Or are you going to have a look into perceived ageing? Like 50 is the new 40? It could be interesting if you were able to cover both of these areas. All the best! :) - U3083503 (discusscontribs) 00:41, 29 September 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

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Hi, I like your topic, I actually work in aged care :). I think it would be really beneficial to explain the developmental ageing process first, and there are many theories on this. It would also be good to go into detail about the how and why people start to lose control over their life, ie: family stepping in, physical, ,mentally, whether they are moved into residential facilities etc. I think looking at the emotional toll the ageing process takes on people would be interesting too, I see it every day where people are forced into residential facilities and that is it for them, they feel worthless and like they have no independence left at all. People become depressed, and isolated even if they are living at home, these would be worthwhile mentioning how it happens. Getting into the positives, even people with the smallest quality of life left find ways of benefiting from what they can do still, and this you can see improves their psychological wellbeing and gives them a sense of purpose, so I think that's a good idea you have about some tips to help you feel you still have some control, have a purpose, and have some independence left. Good luck with it all, I really look forward to reading it, looks very interesting :).

--Lucy90 (discusscontribs) 23:43, 4 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Thanks for your post. I decided to approach this subject from the perspective of two of the most engaging theories of ageing, activity and disengagement theory. I based much of my discussion on what they had to say about satisfaction in later life and combined everything I had mentioned in a critique of those theories. I found a lot of positive evidence regarding emotional capability in later life. Still a bunch more editing to be done etc.

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Hey! Good choice of topic, it seems like you could do a lot with this one! When reading what you have so far I started thinking of the cross-cultural variations of ageing, for example how views of ageing differ from culture to culture and how this impact peoples emotions of the process. I remembered something that was briefly mentioned in another unit of mine, about how in some traditional cultures where information and skills of an older person are needed in order to contribute and enhance a society. Thus, in these cultures older people are regarded as very wise and earn the highest social respect. So perhaps in these cultures the emotions of older people are much more positive because of the positive status that comes of it. Where as in other cultures (usually western cultures) there is a lot of emphasis on the negatives of ageing such as a decline in memory, stereotyping etc. So, again perhaps this might be some suggestions as to why we feel more negative emotions when we think/feel like we are rapidly approaching the transition into old age. I think it may have been developmental psych? So I went through the chapters and found a bit about it, if you wanted to have a look to do some initial background reading on it. If you have done that unit and have the book (Peterson, (2010). Looking Forward through the lifespan 5th ed) pages 484-488 might come in handy and if you do not have the book I am happy to lend it to you. Also, I put some links below of some books on google that go over this kind of topic as well if you decide this is something you want to incorporate into page! :)

Look forward to reading more of your work! U3083529 (discusscontribs)

Thanks, I have completed that unit. Unfortunately I left my textbook in Sydney, luckily there has been no lack of reading on the subject. I had considered including discussion about how emotion varies across cultures, but I was already worried about the word limit.

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I suggest no border and background colour. Background colour can make it more difficult for people with visual impairment to read the text. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:28, 26 October 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

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Overall[edit source]

An interesting presentation that is relevant to us all! Well done.

Structure and content[edit source]

Important theories are explored to an adequate level for this overview. Research is really nicely integrated throughout. The structure could be improved; it appears a bit 'choppy' in sections (mostly towards the end). Illustrative examples could also have been included.

Communication[edit source]

The voice-over is well-paced, with good pauses between sentences and slides. Slightly more expression could have been used. Some slides may have too much information, for example, the theories could have been presented separately. The use of dot points would also help to make the slides more clear. No images are included.

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Basic production tools are used to an adequate level. The audio quality is good. The visual quality is generally good, except for one blurry figure. A link to the book chapter is not provided.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter which could be improved by expanding the content around the main topic - i.e., what is the effect of ageing on emotion. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Expand focus on the central question e.g., on the final sentence "Later life is marked by increased positive emotions and decreased negative emotions." in the main body.
    1. It could be helpful to discuss and link to Zimbardo's time perspective.

Research[edit source]

    1. The Reeve (2009) textbook is over-cited; concentrate on using primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  1. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  2. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression is reasonably good.
    1. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    2. The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., where clarification templates have been added to the page).
    3. The conclusion provides an effective dot point summary.

citation at the end of the sentence instead.

  1. Layout
    1. Check and correct the heading levels
    2. Coloured boxes and backgrounds were overused; these have been removed.
    3. Not all images have Figure captions.
    4. Limited use of Tables and/or Figures; could be expanded.
  2. Learning features
    1. Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links
  3. Spelling is very good.
  4. Grammar is generally very good.
    1. Grammar for some sentences needs improving (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
  5. APA style
    1. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order.
    2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    3. The reference list is not in full APA style.

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