Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2013/Visualisation and motivation

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Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

The chapter could benefit from a lot of future improvements, such as rewriting to more closely follow the marking criteria

Theory[edit source]

The chapter was lacking any theoretical background coverage, i.e yes visualisation has been show in research to be effective, but what theories are there to suggest why this works in different contexts?

Research[edit source]

The chapter made a great effort to draw real world examples and applicability of visualisation. However, it needed to draw on academic resources for its empirical background. Rely primarily on peer reviewed journals and edited book chapters for sources.

Written expression[edit source]

The chapter would benefit in future from a more logical flow, and the use of headings to help guide the reader. The written expression was awkward at times, a thorough edit before submission is useful. The chapter would have benefited greatly from some learning features such as figures, in text links and an interactive feature such as a quiz. I suggest a review of APA format to improve the in text citations and reference list.Courtney.reis (discusscontribs)


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via login to the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. If you wish to dispute the marks, see the suggested marking dispute process.

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Overall[edit source]

Overall, a good attempt. See comments below for feedback

Structure and content[edit source]

The presentation applied some good examples, well done. The presentation lacked focus and I think this would be helped in future by applying a more structured approach to help the viewer. Unfortunately I had to stop watching at 5 minutes, so missed some of the coverage of research, but to benefit the presentation include some theoretical background and integrate research into this component of the presentation.

Communication[edit source]

The presentation was a basic presentation to a camera. For future benefit, perhaps try reshooting to a powerpoint to incorporate some images and make it more engaging for the viewer

Production quality[edit source]

The quality of the production was good, and made use of basic tools. Remember to include references and a licensing agreement. Good effort! Courtney.reis (discusscontribs)

Hello! I did some editing and added some improvements as well as a few starting points for future work! --U3160224 (discusscontribs) 13:00, 9 October 2020 (UTC)