Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2013/Self-tracking and motivation

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

A good attempt, see comments below for future improvement

Theory[edit source]

The chapter lacked in depth theoretical coverage – for future improvement further explore and analyse theories/models aiming to explain why self tracking has become so popular

Research[edit source]

The chapter aimed to be “self-help”, which was in line with the task, well done. However, even though it’s a wikiversity book chapter it is still an academic resource, for future improvement rely on peer reviewed journal articles as well as edited book chapters. Try to engage critically in the information you have reviewed, as well as reviewing empirical studies on self tracking.

Written expression[edit source]

The chapter included a lot of direct quotes – for future improvement aim to paraphrase rather than direct quote. The chapter would benefit from a more logical progression of ideas – I believe it needed to have a goal to do this and to summarise at the end, i.e how can you use self tracking to improve your life?.

The learning features included a quiz, well done. For future improvement, include some pictures to make the page more eyecatching, as well as some in text links. The APA style could use some improvement – remember to italicise correctly in your reference list and include page numbers after every direct quote. Good effort!Courtney.reis (discusscontribs)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via login to the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. If you wish to dispute the marks, see the suggested marking dispute process.

Overall[edit source]

A good attempt, see feedback below for comments.

Structure and content[edit source]

The presentation included some interesting theoretical background of why self tracking is popular, well done. For future improvement, include relevant studies and self help tips to help sum up the chapter. The main points need to be identified clearly using visual and audio components

Communication[edit source]

The presentation was a basic power point slide with no voiceover or images. I liked the inclusion of “case study” self quantification tools. For future improvement, include audio and images to make it more engaging.

Production quality[edit source]

The quality of the presentation slides was fine, but didn’t make effective use of many tools excepting powerpoint. Remember to include licensing information and references. Good effort! Courtney.reis (discusscontribs)

Hello, I did some editing to the book chapter to reformat the layout so it reads easier! --U3160224 (discusscontribs) 10:51, 10 October 2020 (UTC)Reply[reply]