Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2013/Protection motivation and health

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Feedback from your PMT section[edit source]

Hi I thought I would come back and see how you were going after transferring your info across. Your page has come along fantastically! I have just edited some of your work in the PMT section (there was a misplaced full stop and behaviour without the 'u') I noticed that you have listed here for an example 'that intrinsic reward would be the pleasure of inhaling tobacco smoke' this is actually an extrinsic reward still, because there is something that is gained from the behaviour. Could I suggest having a look at " Ryan, R. M., & Deci, E. L. (2000). Intrinsic and extrinsic motivations: Classic definitions and new directions. Contemporary Educational Psychology, 25, 54-67. doi:10.1006/ceps.1999.1020" available through This link and it explains intrinsic and extrinsic reward well;

Intrinsic motivation is defined as the doing of an activity for its inherent
satisfactions rather than for some separable consequence. When intrinsically
motivated a person is moved to act for the fun or challenge entailed rather
than because of external prods, pressures, or rewards

so you would say an example of an intrinsic reward would be the actual activity that is being participated in ... the 'just because/or for fun' behaviours.
P.S I'm also delighted that you used the TBP diagram I uploaded. I was hoping it would be good enough to explain it for my work, very pleased that it was clear enough to apply to others work! Peg93 (discusscontribs) 13:17, 3 November 2013 (UTC)

Hi there, I'm doing PMT as a part of my health behaviour theory. I have found a few resources in my chapter- feel free to link back to my page. Would it be ok if I liked to yours? Peg93 (discusscontribs) 04:04, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

  • Hi no worries, thanks for that, and feel free to link to mine. I just need to actually add it all across from Word now U3054791 (discusscontribs) 23:54, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

Hi - the page is looking good. You may want to consider adding a quiz. You can copy the code from my page and change the questions. Really simple to do!--Florence21 (discusscontribs) 12:46, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

Hey Chris

Page is looking great! I suggest maybe breaking up the really big paragraphs into a couple of smaller ones. Also making the image that you have a little bit bigger so it is more easier to read . If you do not know how to do that there is a link here ..Other then that your chapter is coming along great! Nearlllyyyy thereeeeee wooooohoo :)

--Jess7 (discusscontribs) 20:16, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

Chris. Really good work, very interesting. You might try adding a 'See also' heading and linking some other book chapters that have similar topics, such as Nicotine and Motivation (I noticed that you already linked the health behaviours chapter perhaps putting the link here might be better). You can also add external links to other sites that we can go to for more information. Last don't forget to add a conclusion. --Caitlin Malicki (discusscontribs) 00:58, 3 November 2013 (UTC)

Hi, Your chapter is looking great, as you said on the moodle discussion board, it could use with some more pictures but I really like the flow chart diagram you have in there at the moment. I would suggest that in your theory section, you link to the Wikipedia page or section e.g: Extended parallel process theory which will take you directly to the section. Good luck. Kelseyv23 (discusscontribs) 01:43, 3 November 2013 (UTC)

Hi there your page is looking really good at the moment, i was wondering if you were going to look at, or thought of looking at Theory of Planned Behaviour. Most of the research i came across when looking at Blood donation for another assignment seemed to suggest that it was a an extension of Theory of Reasoned Action and perhaps the 'better' (at least in the blood donation context) so it may or may not be useful for you Blerg26 (discusscontribs) 02:59, 3 November 2013 (UTC)

Excellent chapter, goodluck with it!

  • Thanks everyone, this was great feedback! I took into account everything that was posted here and I am really happy with how my page turned out! Thanks :) U3054791 (discusscontribs) 09:24, 4 November 2013 (UTC)

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A very interesting and applicable chapter, well done!.

Theory[edit source]

The chapter demonstrated a broad and detailed knowledge of theories, good work. As the chapter exceeded the word count, for future improvement it might be useful to focus more solely on fewer theories. The chapter lacked and would have benefited from critical analysis of the theories

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The chapter was generally well written, but contained a few spelling and punctuation errors, be sure to thoroughly edit before submission The chapter had some fantastic learning features! Figures and links were great, loved the quiz but unfortunately could not include this in the marking as the chapter exceeded the word count at this point. The APA style was solid, well done, remember to include APA style for figures. Great effort! Courtney.reis (discusscontribs)

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The presentation covered an impressive amount of theory, well done. It covered the main points of the chapter well and integrated applications well. For future improvement, integrate some more of the research from the chapter.

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