Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2013/Fear of success
Christine.DW Suggestion[edit source]
Hey An! Not sure if I'm editing my suggestion right on your page (I updated and put my signature on it too now). Fingers crossed, but I was thinking that it might be good to explore fear of success in sport? It'd be interesting to see if there is a fear of success in sport as well as other life areas.--Christine.DW (discuss • contribs) 08:56, 30 October 2013 (UTC)
Hey! You're page is looking great so far! I just had a couple of reminders. First of all, I noticed that your in text referencing doesn't have dates next to the authors names as of yet, so I just wanted to remind you to put them in so that plagiarism isn't a problem. I also agree with Christine in that looking at fear of success in sport would be a really interesting and applicable topic. You could also look at competitiveness in the workplace or even getting into university courses and how that effects fear of success. I know that succeeding over some of my friends sometimes make me anxious. This might be something interesting to expand on. Good luck in getting your chapter done Victoriagc (discuss • contribs) 12:02, 30 October 2013 (UTC)
Thanks so much for your suggestions on my page and for recommending some articles. Also, I was wondering, would it be ok for me to link my page to yours in internal links as they are somewhat related? Victoriagc (discuss • contribs) 02:39, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
Thank you for your comment on the intrinsic motivation discussion page. Although I have incorporated a fair amount on "work", I haven't actually touched on Herzberg's motivation-hygiene theory (two factor theory) as of yet. Much appreciated. Side note: make sure you list all of your social contributions so that you get marks for them!!! I will add your intrinsic motivation chapter contribution to your user discussion page now. Thanks again and best of luck. --Jacki Ball (discuss • contribs) 05:11, 3 November 2013 (UTC)
- Never mind... you have done it yourself already. Just couldn't see it as the picture of the cute poodle moves your list down the page :) --Jacki Ball (discuss • contribs) 05:15, 3 November 2013 (UTC)
Chapter review and feedback
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Overall, a good attempt, For future improvement, I would recommend working on the written expression and flow of the assignment.
The chapter covered some broad ideas about why fear of success is greater in women than men, which was good to see. For future improvement, try and critique some of the ideas being discussed for a well rounded chapter. The chapter could also be improved in the future by adding some more theoretical coverage of individual differences in fear of success, rather than just gender differences. Great effort!
The chapter included some interesting research, and it was good to see some attempt at critical analysis. For future improvement, I would suggest more critical analysis, and perhaps expansion on the conclusions you drew, i.e is there any studies on the effectiveness of treating clients fear of success, or is this a gap in the literature?
The chapter could benefit in future from work on the written expression. It can be useful to have someone read over the assignment before submission.
The learning features were great, I liked the pictures and the little quiz at the end. For future improvement, try inserting some in text links. Your APA style was solid, well done. Courtney.reis (discuss • contribs)
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A great effort, see comments below for feedback.
The presentation had a structured flow and was easy to follow. For future improvement, the content could include more of a broad overview of the chapters content (i.e more on effects of FOS) and not such a heavy focus on the research detail.
The speaking tone was well paced, but the voiceover was a little fuzzy making it hard to understand at points. The powerpoint presentation was creative, for future improvement I would suggest including some visual components such as images to make it more engaging
The presentation made effective use of basic tools, well done. For future improvement, perhaps rerecord to a script to avoid “trip ups” and with a clearer voiceover. Good use of references, remember to include licensing information. Fantastic effort! Courtney.reis (discuss • contribs)