Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2013/Fear
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[edit source]hey man, how you going man, whats doing young blood? im a help you out :)
you should talk about: the emotional and physical aspects. the anxiety involved with fear and when it becomes too much. maybe also look at using CBT treatments like systematic desensitisation and exposure therapy. the benefits and the flaws of such treatments. like high drop out rates. Duncado92 (discuss • contribs) 03:00, 22 August 2013 (UTC)
good points, cheers home slice Thegrounav (discuss • contribs) 03:04, 22 August 2013 (UTC)
Other aspects to consider
[edit source]Hi there, You have some great ideas for your chapter and your topic links in with mine as I am doing fear of failure! It seems to me that you are definitely on the right track in the aspects you have chosen to discuss. Another aspect that might be beneficial to discuss would be the positive aspects of fear. Fear is not just a negative emotion, but it has positive uses too, such as protecting an individual from harm and preparing them to fight or flee a potentially dangerous situation. It can also be a learning process. These are just a few aspects of fear that I have come across in the text book and I thought looking at the good side of fear may be something to consider. Also, do you mind if I link your chapter in my internal links as our topics are related? Good Luck! Victoriagc (discuss • contribs) 13:12, 30 October 2013 (UTC)
Previous chapter
[edit source]FYI, there was a previous chapter about this topic which didn't reach satisfactory level, but you may be able to build on the work that was done - see Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Fear. Also see that chapter's talk page for comments and suggestions. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:58, 27 August 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for the heads up James! Thegrounav (discuss • contribs) 11:34, 4 September 2013 (UTC)
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[edit source]Hi I was just wondering if I could link to your chapter, mine is on Protection Motivation Theory and I talk about fear and fear appeals. If you cover protection motivation theory feel free to link to mine as well, cheers! U3054791 (discuss • contribs) 02:48, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
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[edit source]hey i found this article was pretty good for treating fear. just though i'de share it with you: Rauhut, A. S., Thomas, B. L., & Ayers, J. J. B. (2001). Threatments that weaken pavlovian conditioned fear and thwart its renewal in rats: Implications for treating human phobias. Journal of Experimental Psychology: Animal Behavior Processes, 27(2), 99-114. doi: 10.1037//0097-7403.27.2.99.Thosecows (discuss • contribs) 10:12, 2 November 2013 (UTC)
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[edit source]Hey, chapter definitely looks good! only suggestions would be maybe having the TED talk in a external links or the see also section? just as the thumbnail isnt a screen shot? Also your reference list, remember will need to be APA, so have a hanging indent. i found a really simple way of doing this, i'l edit your page with it, feel free to change it back though! Otherwise looks good, unless you wanted to add more colour, images etc to engage the reader a little more? or maybe like a spooky sound clip if you could find one?? Belle Hughes (discuss • contribs) 04:31, 3 November 2013 (UTC)
I love that it's very eye-grabbing from the start! I also really like the summary of fear management options table. In your overview section I think "stimuli" is the plural of stimulus (so instead of stimuluses). Also, I don't know if it's correct APA to use contraction words, so maybe replacing "we're" with we are? The only other thing I came across was in the third paragraph of the "What happens when fear becomes maladaptive?" bit, maybe changing "anxieties" to "anxiety". But yeah, it looks really great!! Well done :) Ashkrance (discuss • contribs) 04:49, 3 November 2013 (UTC)
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[edit source]Hi this is a great book chapter! I think it is a great addition to have separate boxes which contain examples, it helps remind the audience that this is a self help book. Also centring your structure around focus questions seems a good method of making sure you keep up with where you are going with this chapter and what is going to be covered. Perhaps in the "what effects does fear have" box you could move the place of the link to the audio on fear and imagination, I think it creates some spare space underneath that section which breaks the text up too much? But otherwise, good job :) U3054791 (discuss • contribs) 04:34, 3 November 2013 (UTC)
Peg93 (discuss • contribs) 05:38, 3 November 2013 (UTC)
[edit source]Hi, your chapter looks fantastic. Just some feedback in your section 'Psychotherapeutic contributions' the example box nearly overlaps the text. I'm unsure on how to overcome this other than using the indent " : " before each line. Peg93 (discuss • contribs) 05:38, 3 November 2013 (UTC)
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[edit source]Hey. Your chapter is really good and very informative. I think your chapter could possibly go into the treatment of fear a bit more. Maybe have a bit more detail about how CBT would work for fear, including more detail on any other treatments. Otherwise, it's a great chapter. Blue Tardis (discuss • contribs) 07:44, 3 November 2013 (UTC)
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[edit source]Just wanted to say this chapter is fantastic. I found it very informative and easy to understand. I especially liked how you linked the specific fears to other wiki pages to allow for a more in depth understanding for each specific fear. You've done a really great job! U3052304 (discuss • contribs)
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Overall[edit source]Beautifully presented chapter! Research and theory have been integrated particularly well throughout. Great job. Theory has been really nicely integrated into this chapter. Theories are well identified and applied. Some evidence of critical analysis is also evident which is really fantastic. The resaerch presented is explained at a level appropriate for the target audience, and provides great support for the theories presented. The presentation, structure and layout of this chapter are all great. Well done for including some interactive features. APA in well done. There are some spelling errors throughout. Perhaps ask someone else to proof read before submission, as it can be difficult after you have been working on it for so long. ShaunaB (discuss • contribs)
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Overall[edit source]A professional presentation, which summarises chapter content nicely - well done! Theory and research are well integrated throughout, with all key concepts being included. The flow is logical and clear. Content appears accurate and is of an academic standard. Communication is very clear. Information on slides is complimentary to dialogue, and the pictures used make the presentation more engaging. Very small areas for improvement would be to speak a little more slowly, and include more illustrative examples throughout. Picture and sound quality are clear. Basic production tools have been used well, and the presentation comes across as professional. It is clear that time and effort has been put into this. Nice job!ShaunaB (discuss • contribs) |