Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2013/Emotion and cancer diagnosis

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Hi, I was thinking it might be useful to include either a link to, or information on the five stages of grief? --Janed1987 (discusscontribs) 09:56, 26 October 2013 (UTC)

Chapter draft feedback[edit]

Any suggestions on how to improve this chapter? (The preceding unsigned comment was added by Everysingleusernameistaken (talkcontribs) 18:41, 14 September 2013‎)

Great to see the excellent progress on this draft chapter during the first half of semester - congratulations. Here's some suggestions - feel free to take, leave or discuss any of them:

  1. The overall structure is excellent.
  2. The style is well-written, easy to read, and draws on peer-reviewed research.
  3. Perhaps some more can be said about the initial emotional reactions to a diagnosis e.g., shock.
  4. The section on adolescents is excellent. Does this also apply to children - or should there be a separate section for children?
  5. Perhaps try to incorporate some more about emotion theory/ies.
  6. The content about coping styles is useful.
  7. Wiki links can be made from key concepts to other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles
  8. Maybe one or two case study examples could help - e.g., one person who responded adapatively and another who coped poorly with a cancer diagnosis?
  9. I made some minor copyediting edits.
  10. Check references for APA style

I hope this helps. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:05, 16 September 2013 (UTC)


This looks great! Good work! I think I will probably use what you've got so far as a guide for considering my own book chapter :) Really neat layout and organisation of info. Best of luck! PatrickBateman (discusscontribs) 04:30, 21 October 2013 (UTC)

Awesome job Kasperi! You can definitely tell that you put a lot of effort into this. I really like how you did separate sections on men, women and adolescence. I think that provides readers with the real differences that can occur at different ages and different sex, as cancer can effect these groups differently. Great work :)--Maltrep (discusscontribs) 01:23, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

Table captions/attribution[edit]

I like the use of tables. The captions have citation(s) which is good. This is a somewhat subtle suggestion - Are the tables adapted from or based on these sources or is the table reproduced from these sources? Usually this would be indicated. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:16, 30 October 2013 (UTC)

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  1. Overall, this is a solid, effective chapter which explains emotional impacts and considerations for patients, health professionals, and carers of a cancer diagnosis with useful emphasis on coping strategies and support. The chapter provides impressive breadth of coverage, is well-structured, and is well-written, with useful inclusion of wiki-features such as images, tables, wiki links, and a quiz. The chapter also has a well-developed Overview and Conclusion. See additional comments below, but I think the main area for improvement could be around psychological theory related to emotion and coping. Perhaps one other area where the chapter might be improved is with regard to the book's self-help theme - e.g., perhaps consider some take-home messages or tips for patients, doctors, and carers, although these are available within the conclusion.


  1. Hope theory is used, but not related to research. I was also confused about the answer to Quiz question 1 (hope is negative?).
  2. Coping theory is also used (good), to some extent.
  3. There is not a lot explicit mention of other theory e.g., I wonder whether self-determination theory could be helpful? The emphasis seemed to be on research-oriented demographic influencers of emotion/coping (e.g., gender, age) rather than theory about emotional copying per se. So, my sense is that the psychological theory of the chapter could be extended.


  1. The chapter makes good use of relevant citations to research studies, although key studies could be described in more depth, with some critical analysis (e.g., method? effect sizes?)
  2. Race (or cultural background?) is mentioned is an influential factor in how people respond to cancer diagnosis - but this isn't elaborated on?

Written expression[edit]

  1. The chapter is well organised (logical flow, with well-balanced overview and conclusion) and well-written, making it easy and interesting to read.
  2. Thanks for adding some wiki links e.g., cancer. More could be added e.g., fear, pain, hopelessness and death.
  3. Some statements would benefit from the inclusion of supportive citations - e.g., see [factual?] tags in the chapter.
  4. APA style - include page numbers for quotes e.g., "Hope is "a cognitive set that influences behavior and affective functioning" (Gum & Snyder)"
  5. Be wary of overstating/overgeneralising e.g., "Male patients prefer..." probably should be "Male patients tend to prefer..."

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:10, 6 December 2013 (UTC)

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonable, basic text-based, narrated audio multimedia presentation.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. What is the problem/question? (Set this up clearly as part of the Overview/Intro - it is mentioned, but perhaps emphasis on this would help to engage the viewer).
  2. No references to specific psychological theories or research? (until a brief reference at the end to hope)


  1. Slides were basic, but clear.
  2. Narrated audio was basic, but reasonably clear.

Production quality[edit]

  1. No images?
  2. Font size could be larger, but was otherwise clear (dark text on light background)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:32, 8 December 2013 (UTC)