Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2013/Dementia and emotion

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Comments[edit source]

Hi I thought I would give you some feedback on your chapter as you are making the finishing touches :) firstly you mention in the third paragraph “data from 2010 showed… and there is no reference for this statement. I also see other statements that may need evidence to back them up such as “the onset of alzheimers is slow… it is most common forms of dementia… research has shown that feelings associated with depression etc (in emotional effects of dementia on carers)’. I’m not sure if you want to re-look this over to back up your claims more with research and evidence. Other than that, I think your chapter is really well written and expressed clearly. I enjoyed reading this, and your discussion flows well. Great layout and well done on getting a quiz in there! Best of luck Rashpocket (discusscontribs) 09:01, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

I was doing some initial research on a topic I've been thinking about and thought this might document might be of use as its to do with caring for Alzheimer's patients. Motivation to Care If you want the whole article I can email it to you Kari2515 (discusscontribs) 01:29, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

Wow! Fantastic work Emma! This page is really coming along well. Ashkrance (discusscontribs) 2:23, 17 October 2013

Hey Emma. You have got a great page coming along. I really really love the poem! That's such a awesome touch to the topic. You are doing really well Jess7 (discusscontribs) 8:50, 19 October 2013

Hey Emma, not sure if you're planning on including some information about Dementia prevalence in Australia and the world or not, but I came across this article the other day that you may be interested in:

Prince, M., Bryce, R., Albanese, E., Wimo, A., Ribeiro, W., & Ferri, C. P. (2013). The global prevalence of dementia: a systematic review and metaanalysis. Alzheimer's & Dementia, 9(1), 63-75.

Ashkrance (discusscontribs) 02:30, 21 October 2013 (UTC)

Nice work Emma! Woah! I also agree, the poem is a really nice touch, great to lighten up the heavy information. I'm going to steal that idea if it's ok with you? Might use some lyrics or something. You are make win! PatrickBateman (discusscontribs) 03:50, 21 October 2013 (UTC)

Hey Emma! I was just thinking: I really like your poem, I reckon it would be great for you to include it or something similar in your multimedia presetation :) Also, not sure if you're aware but I think an image in your overview section isn't working/there's a bit of mark-up there. Ashkrance (discusscontribs) 09:52, 23 October 2013 (UTC)

Thanks so much guys, this is all so helpful :) - Emma

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:11, 17 October 2013 (UTC)

Previous material[edit source]

FYI, check out and link to, as appropriate, the previous M&E chapter(s) on dementia as well as to material within the Caregiving and dementia project. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:01, 17 October 2013 (UTC)

Hi, Emma. I know that you are pretty much done however I thought this might be something you can add to the Carers section. It's an Inventory scale developed to asses the carers grief level at different stages of the disease MM-CGI-SF. You could also include it in the See Also.--Caitlin Malicki (discusscontribs) 01:45, 3 November 2013 (UTC)

A quick look[edit source]

Thanks for your thanks for an earlier edit I made - it prompted me to check-in - the chapter is looking fabulous. Love the use of images - they are not easy to find for dementia. Quiz is also looking excellent as does overall structure and layout.

My main comment about content is to expand the emotional effects of dementia section. It could be useful to connect this the literature about challenging or problem behaviour (which arise largely due to cognitive/emotional deficits) which can also be understood more humanely as "unmet needs". There is some more info here: Caregiving and dementia/Topics/Behavioural and psychological symptoms.

Suggestion - for references, close the italics e.g., like this<nowikiJournal Name</nowiki> -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:50, 28 October 2013 (UTC)

Thanks James! I see your point, and am finding some good information on this subject! :) - EmmaP

Pass time - Living with Alzheimer's video[edit source]

Check out this recent poignant video - Pass time - Living with Alzheimer's - in many ways it models an emotionally mature but deeply honest response from a family carer of someone with dementia. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:50, 28 October 2013 (UTC)

hey, have you considered going into other types of dementia such as alcohol related dementia: Korsakoff's syndrome and Wernicke's encephalopathy. that could be something to look into and the differences.Thosecows (discusscontribs) 03:56, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

Feedback[edit source]

Hi, I really like your chapter, it is well done and easy to read, on the whole, some sentences involved a double take but they were minimal. I changed helplines to help lines as I feel it reads better as two words or you may want to hyphenate it. In the coping section I also changed effects of dementia to symptoms as it seems to fit better. I am doing Alzheimer's and motivation and have included your page in my see also and may do a link to it within my section on motivation loss due to depression and apathy. In your preventing dementia section you could also link to my page as that is what mine is mostly about but thats up to you. I really like the poem at the end and having experienced familiar Alzheimer's it was very emotional for me and I think it has a good understanding type impact at the end. I also like the quiz, good addition.

Your word count is also over but only by 400 words and I think it reads pretty well the way it is now, I couldn't imagine getting rid of anything. Im not sure how strict james is gonna be on word count, and if we are allowed 10 per cent, then you fine :) Kari2515 (discusscontribs) 04:59, 2 November 2013

Hey Emma, Your chapter looks great, it's really interesting! Good work! Bilbo Baggins (discusscontribs) 05:33, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

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:) (enough said, I think!) --Jacki Ball (discusscontribs) 19:41, 3 November 2013 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid, well researched chapter which is targetted at a lay person. It does a good job of describing the emotional challenges for carers of and people with dementia, and presents a balance, person-centred perspective. Thanks for tackling this much needed topic. The main areas for improvement could be in emphasising a theoretical framework(s) that related to emotion and more careful and precise use of citations to support claims.

Theory[edit source]

  1. The information about types of dementia didn't seem particularly strongly related to the key purpose of the topic (emotional impacts of dementia). This info could perhaps be summarised and linked to in a different resource, allowing more concentration on emotional aspects e.g., how do emotional responses differ across the types of dementia? If there was more to say about how emotions differed between the types of dementia, then this might justify keeping the current sections.
  2. A good understanding of emotional aspects of dementia for the person with dementia and carers is demonstrated, however more explicit use of emotion theory could be helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Good familiarity with relevant research literature is evident, however in several places, more citations could be used to support claims (e.g., see {{citation needed}} tags). In addition, it could be helpful to explain key studies in more detail.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Overall, the chapter is well presented (e.g., images, sections, tables, quiz, APA style).
  2. Several wiki links were used, but perhaps wiki links could be added more consistently e.g., depression should be linked on its first mention.
  3. The main area for improvement is in the clarity of written expression in some places (e.g., see my edits for some suggestions).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:00, 2 December 2013 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this presentation provides a good summary of the book chapter, making effective use of narrated slides.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. What is the focus or problem that this presentation addresses? (Intro/Overview) - what is the self-help issue? The presentation starts with describing dementia, but not the specific focus of the presentation.
  2. A logical flow was evident (reflects book chapter structure).
  3. Useful suggestions towards the end with tips and recommendations for care and carers.
  4. Limited reference to theory and research.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Pace of speaking was quite reasonable (maybe slightly on the fast side).

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Font size for sub-points would be easier to read if larger in size.
  2. Use of font colour for key words was helpful.
  3. One by revealing of dot points helped to engage/focus attention.
  4. Appropriate licensing of presentation.
  5. No references/ing?
  6. Perhaps a case study or example might help to engage the viewer.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:55, 8 December 2013 (UTC)