Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2013/Alzheimer's and motivation

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Response[edit source]

Hey Guys,

Thanks for all the feedback, I hope I have fixed up the things addresses. Funnily the articles provided I had already downloaded but thanks for the help, it means a lot

Internal motivation and Alzheimer's disease[edit source]


I am interested to see how internal motivation would impact on Alzheimer's.

I found some interesting article to refer:

Kane, M. N. (2002). Awareness of ageism, motivation, and countertransference in the care of elders with Alzheimer's disease. American journal of Alzheimer's disease and other dementias, 17(2), 101-109.

Hope this helps,

Good luck on the rest of your book chapter! :)

JisuKim (discusscontribs)

Heading casing[edit source]

Note that the Wikiversity convention is for lower-case headings. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:52, 25 September 2013 (UTC)

Section: What can be Done When the First Signs Appear?[edit source]

I've just read your current draft of your book chapter, the layout is brilliant. I did think however this section was a little difficult to read, mostly due to the links and references posted through out, it did throw me off abit. Hope this helps with editing :) Tovey ally (discusscontribs) 00:15, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

Hi Kari :)

I am doing Dementia and emotion and found a good Journal article on Alzheimer's disease while looking into different types. This is the link for it: And if that doesn't work this is my reference for it: Mathias, J. L., & Burke, J. (2009). Cognitive functioning in Alzheimer’s and vascular dementia: A meta-analysis. Neuropsychology, 23(4), 411-423. Doi: 10.1037/a0015384 It just has a good explanation of what it is and the differences compared to vascular dementia.

I think I'll also link your chapter with mine as they go so well together :) EmmaP (discusscontribs) 18:23, 16 October 2013 (UTC)

Can one bring on/make worse Alzheimer's?[edit source]

This is a great page so far. The outline in general is excellent and your sections on preventing and fighting Alzheimer's early on are clear and a good example of your work. I thought I'd comment in the "making it worse" section since this is the one least fleshed out. I don't know how much work you've done on it since you put up this draft, but I would put some thought into the presentation of this section, since the layout and writing of one section in context with the rest of the chapter is worth marks as well. Since this is a self help book, presenting the information on how Alzheimer's can be made worse in a purely negative context could damage the chapter overall. I hope I'm not telling you something you already know, and that this comment might be somewhat constructive. Tying this section in with the "what can be done when first signs appear" section might increase the positivity and productivity of the section, as could making similar preventative suggestions with each point about what causes and strengthens the effects of Alzheimer's. I hope this has been somewhat helpful. Telamon (discusscontribs) 13:58, 28 October 2013 (UTC)

See Also[edit source]

A good idea would be to include other related links from wikiversity to Alzheimer's. I've provided you with two:

Hope it helps U3054911 (discusscontribs) 02:47, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

Yes, excellent suggestion. Please also see resources at Caregiving and dementia. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:41, 1 November 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for your feedback on my chapter. Most of my research has been focusing on the emotions that caregivers feel, so I have done little in-depth research about dementia (though your page was very helpful for finding research material that I hadn't thought about looking for) so most of what I found was in the papers that I have used. When it comes to prevention, the research I found is that there are ways to possibly slow down onset, but if you are likely to get it then you will. As causes of some of the dementia types are still relatively unknown it means that the prevention methods are more about things that have proven to help, but my not actually prevent the onset. That is my take on the research, and you have done more research so it is likely that you have found other material suggesting otherwise. As I said I did only the basic research on the causes and symptoms of dementia. --Caitlin Malicki (discusscontribs) 14:23, 3 November 2013 (UTC)

Reference[edit source]

Fillit, H. M., et al. (2002). Achieving and Maintaining Cognitive Vitality With Aging. Mayo Clinic Proceedings, 77(7), 681-695.

Hi just bring this reference of yours to your attention. I'm not sure if you had done this by accident but you can't use et al. in APA formatting for the reference list. I got the following information from during a quick google search. I hope this helps.

Three to Seven Authors List by last names and initials; commas separate author names, while the last author name is preceded again by ampersand.

Kernis, M. H., Cornell, D. P., Sun, C. R., Berry, A., Harlow, T., & Bach, J. S. (1993). There's more to self-esteem than whether it is high or low: The importance of stability of self-esteem. Journal of Personality and Social Psychology, 65, 1190-1204.

More Than Seven Authors List by last names and initials; commas separate author names. After the sixth author's name, use an ellipses in place of the author names. Then provide the final author name. There should be no more than seven names.

Miller, F. H., Choi, M. J., Angeli, L. L., Harland, A. A., Stamos, J. A., Thomas, S. T., . . . Rubin, L. H. (2009). Web site usability for the blind and low-vision user. Technical Communication, 57, 323-335.

Tovey ally (discusscontribs) 20:55, 3 November 2013 (UTC)

Oh additionally, I'm not sure if you are aware but the first time you cite a reference within text, you need to cite all authors the first time only. I did notice when reading through that again the first time you cited Fillit, H. M., et al. in text you used Fillit, H. M., et al. Hopefully you will have time this morning to correct these before you submit.

Tovey ally (discusscontribs) 21:03, 3 November 2013 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter provides very impressive coverage of an applied health issue from a self-help perspective using motivational theory - exactly what was hoped for! Smiley.svg. The chapter is particularly well-written and is clearly based on an excellent understanding of relevant research literature and is well-structured around, and focused on the topic and the marking criteria. This is one of the best chapters written so far. Congratulations. We definitely need to get this submitted for the dementia essay prize competition in 2014, so let's keep in touch about that.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Strong orientation in the chapter to motivation - and ways that motivation can affect and be affected by AD. I am impressed that the chapter doesn't over prescribe the type of exercise or social contact or cognitive stimulation and recognises the important of a person having control and autonomy in choosing the type of activity.
  2. The chapter started off using AD as an abbreviation - I've removed this and just changed it to Alzheimer's.

Research[edit source]

  1. I like the way the chapter makes a research-based claim in a simple, matter of fact way, then provides more detailed explanation and citation, the draws to a conclusion.
  2. The chapter is well referenced and provides interesting details about a number of relevant studies, and the claims it makes are supported by relevant citations.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. The chapter is well-written - it is rich and interesting, yet is easy to read.
  2. The overview and conclusion are excellent and help to draw the chapter together.
  3. Great that so many appropriate links to relevant Wikipedia articles were added. Change links to Wikipedia articles into internal links e.g., using [[w:Article name|Article name]] #Effect use is made of images, despite there being a lack of freely usable images depicting dementia. #The quiz is well-prepared. #References - Check APA style for capitalistion of journal article and book titles (should be sentence case)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:04, 3 December 2013 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via login to the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. If you wish to dispute the marks, see the suggested marking dispute process.


Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid, basic presentation which provides some useful tips for addressing motivational problems for those with AD.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. What is the self-help problem or underlying question/purpose for the presentation (Intro/Overview)?
  2. Practical suggestions are provided (useful).

Communication[edit source]

  1. Voice-over is somewhat monotone; greater variations in tone would help to increase engagement.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Production quality
  2. Audio record quality was somewhat muffled (microphone too close?).
  3. Sometimes enunciation could be clearer.
  4. Slides were well-prepared, with images helping to engage and not too much text.
  5. Slide show may not have been in full-screen presentation mode? (It seemed that on the slide at ~ 3 minutes 15, the image is selected?)
  6. What is the source for the images and were permissions obtained to re-use?
  7. I had some difficulty playing the presentation after approx. 3:40 (maybe just have had delay in preloading).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:25, 8 December 2013 (UTC)