Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Stress and emotional health

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The Holmes and Rahe stress scale is really good to determine what the main predictors of stress is. Miz.mira 20:06, 27 October 2011 (UTC) There is an adult and non adults version.[reply]

Really like the chapter so far, its great that you've covered how/why stress is essential in life. There are a few things with referencing that need to be altered, just with authors that appear between sentences and the year following each author. Good use of picutres and a quiz, particularly like the diagram at the beginning of the chapter. U3033746 01:50, 1 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Guys :)

Hi West S, the page is looking amazing. I think you have done really well to explain all the processes in a concise yet informative way. I was worried that there would be a lot of cross-over between our topics, but you have done a great job at narrowing down on the aspects of well-being. Congrats on finishing the page - well done! :) (Psych 125 22:13, 2 November 2011 (UTC))[reply]

Your chapter is looking really good - each section and accompanying diagrams allow for an easy read. I noticed a few in-text references that need to be accompanied by a year of publication. I like that you ended with a quiz and included a case study. Maybe your title up the top of the page could read bigger? Great work :) AngeM 22:56, 2 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Shelly, Great chapter, I was just thinking do you want to add a little more on cortisol and that it can be easily tested at home, which can give an individual a instant reation of what the stressors may be. user:u990911 3 november 2011 (UTC) This is a really great chapter - and it links well with my Toxic Workplace chapter - well done - Magnolia


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall comments
    1. A well-designed chapter outlining the effects of stress on health. I particularly like the layout and the way images (with captions), quotes, case studies and a quiz have been incorporated into the chapter.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory comments
    1. Great coverage of the GAS theory.
    2. Discussion of good/bad stress could mention Selye’s terms: stress/eustress.
    3. Selye contributed to stress responses theories, not a specific theory called The Stress Response Theory, although he did coin the term. As you go on to show, his GAS comprised his main contribution.
    4. Discussion of how anxiety is necessary for human performance, could include the inverted u-hypothesis.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research comments
    1. Relied on a somewhat limited range of references, most notably Rice.
    2. The self-help and avoidance section hits the target for the assignment.
    3. Could be strengthened by greater critical analysis of the research studies.
    4. It is interesting to note that beta blockers can inhibit some of the effects of stress on the body by blocking epinephrine and noradrenaline receptor sites.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression comments
    1. The chapter is very well set out with great use of images, captions, case studies and a quiz to illustrate main ideas.
    2. There were a number of typographical errors (e.g., Interpendent, Seyl’s, adrenal glad), incorrect word usage (affect/effect), inconsistent hyphenation (e.g., self esteem) and the length of some paragraphs (like the intro) could be shortened.
    3. The style of writing was generally engaging.
    4. Try to avoid contractions in formal writing (e.g., It’s, you're) and check punctuation.
    5. Remember to cite references appropriately; sometimes there is no citation and some sentences mention studies but do not provide references to back up claims.

Rfoster 05:03, 28 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic narrated presentation with bullet-point text.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. In the general introduction, explain the self-help focus questions that guide the presentation and/or explain what will be covered.
  2. Probably too much detail is covered. Instead, focus on fewer key points and find ways to communicate these effectively e.g., through example and reinforcement of the idea.
  3. The focus on tips towards the end was promising.
  4. No summary?

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation relied heavily on scripted-audio read out fairly quickly, with a small number of small text slides.
  2. Consider using more slides each with less information.
  3. Consider including images to help illustrate ideas.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Overall, production quality was fair.
  2. Text was far too small.
  3. Audio quality was fair - for some words, it went a bit 'buzzy'?
  4. Attribution for images?
  5. Thanks for licensing the presentation under a Creative Commons Attribution license.
  6. Link to the chapter?

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:52, 11 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]