Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Spiritual and religious motivation

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Comments[edit source]

Hi Uzi - a really interesting topic - very well laid out - well done - Magnolia

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall comments
    1. This chapter explores multiple theories applicable to religiosity and describes current research findings; however, it does not address the self-help aspect of the task and would benefit from a summary of take home messages.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory comments
    1. Maslow’s self-actualisation and Rogers’ fully functioning individual are appropriately applied to spiritual growth and built upon to introduce the idea of Transcendent actualisation, a theory highly relevant to the topic.
    2. Intrinsic and extrinsic motivations to belong to religious groups are explored.
    3. use of attachment theory as applied to God is creative.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research comments
    1. An impressive array of recent research is discussed
    2. There is minimal engagement with the self-help focus of the chapter.
    3. How is perceived stress a health benefit? Does God attachment lower perceived stress levels? Stating the direction of the relationship and its magnitude would strengthen discussion of research.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression comments
    1. Focus questions are used to help set up the topic.
    2. Great use of images to illustrate key text, but not all have captions.
    3. Reference list does not follow APA style; journal articles and volume numbers should be italicised.

Rfoster 09:46, 11 December 2011 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, standard narrated audio with bullet-point slide text.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The general introduction would benefit from identifying some self-help focus questions to be addressed in the presentation
  2. What was the connection between each slide? (It seemed like topics were run through one after the other?)
  3. No summary of take-home messages? Frowny.svg

Communication[edit source]

  1. Friendly, intonated voice-over (good)
  2. Perhaps take more time to pronounce some words
  3. Perhaps cover slightly less content more slowly, to allow the key ideas to sink in for a viewer
  4. Consider using more examples

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Well done on using Wiki Commons images
  2. Well done on providing a link back to the chapter in the presentation - also provide this in the multimedia description or comments
  3. Consider licensing the presentation under a Creative Commons Attribution license

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:53, 10 December 2011 (UTC)